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Inner City Premiere Contest Winner

Broken windows give no reflection graffiti for those who can read concrete streets are polluted rivers passing shoes leave bodies in need disillusion is a crumbled sidewalk stretching to an intersection of who cares empty eyes follow shadows that wander stolen clothes from the morgue to wear hope is a night's survival passing when sounds of gunfire are heard silence comes from gang handshakes pigeons and crows the only bird A bell that rings in the distance the church the preacher will rob players and pimps with tin cups approach the stampeding mob a moat of suburbs surround gates to the castle are locked guards at ramparts bleed blue guns are always cocked a cry only heard by those crying in a dirty world of make believe tomorrow finds another broken window a rock by a child that can't leave 5/6/17

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Date: 5/29/2017 2:09:00 PM
So very sad.It is not a nice world to live in.Too much wrongs going on it is unsafe place.
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Date: 5/21/2017 3:30:00 PM
Sad but great write Frederick, felt like I was there, unbelievable imagery, you are surpassing even yourself, with this write! Congrats on a fine win!
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Date: 5/17/2017 2:48:00 PM
powerful, pertinent, and prophetic!
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Date: 5/17/2017 9:41:00 AM
WOW! Glad I read this. So well said....look at the ART!!! "Moat of suburbs" !!!!!! EXCELLENT! Bleed blue... but its all about being THERE, feeling it, slamming that imagery at us so that only the indifferent can't FEEL you. This is superb writing, Frederic, and you know I never gush unless gushing is due. I'd have given this first place, too :D (PS ... this left me shaken, as it should... a good upset, if you know what I mean. Easy to understand, hard to read...)
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Date: 5/13/2017 4:04:00 PM
You described the heart aches of the inner city so well in your fine poem, Frederic. Congrats on your top win :)
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Date: 5/10/2017 7:28:00 PM
Frederick, I am SO glad to see that Brian also realized how stunning this was. Congratulations.
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Date: 5/9/2017 6:57:00 PM
Congrats on your win. Very well penned !!
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Date: 5/8/2017 10:18:00 PM
Choice of words and the crisp description of hollowness is wonderful.
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Date: 5/8/2017 5:03:00 PM
As Nette says .....such an edginess of gray, one can visualize as if watching a raw film unfold in black and white. Well done, Frederic! Congratulations on your well deserved win !
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Date: 5/8/2017 3:32:00 PM
i am amazed by the edginess of this deep poem, frederick.. best congrats on your win!..huggs
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Date: 5/8/2017 11:50:00 AM
A well-deserved win Frederic. This is a powerful piece. Congratulations!
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Date: 5/8/2017 11:11:00 AM
Terrific work Frederic, congratulations...
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Date: 5/7/2017 12:54:00 AM
oh my goodness. this is magnificent writing, Frederick. WOW!!!
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Date: 5/6/2017 7:04:00 PM
An Outstanding free verse here Frederic!!The power and palpable nature of your imagery paints a poignant and sad word picture of the "Inner City." A SEVEN -- ABSOLUTELY!! Cheers and Best, Gary
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Date: 5/6/2017 5:52:00 PM
Great job Frederick. Saddened by such images, the country life for me! Kind regards, Craig
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Date: 5/6/2017 3:52:00 PM
What vivid deeply depressing imagery Frederic. I would find it very difficult to move from the safety and beauty of our little Island to somewhere in a city like this:-( hugs jan xx7
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