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Indifference

Through the silence...time seeps in small steps Another morning wakes with gentle glory It casts a flush of green from the waiting day Around me, and everywhere I look Time slipping, sliding, close upon the slopes With mists from the mountainside, And chanting comes from valleys deep Echoes of time casting shadows A vast world of uncaring clocks Who see me with no regard in the scheme of things While minutes tick my life away A clock so indifferent, without hesitation, Carries on with not a care If I'm here, or if I'm gone Continues on, with pure conviction _________________________ For PD's Contest: #3

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 5/11/2010 8:07:00 PM
It feels as though it ticks so much faster as we get older. Sometimes wonder where it all went. Vince
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Date: 3/23/2009 8:53:00 AM
Thanks for you comments on Mr. Ayers and Mr. Lopez --- is not their story a moving one. I could resist the humanitaritian cry of that one for a celebration. My dear, when the clock of life itself shall tick no more, love that we nurtured shall swim immortal beyond time's shore. Peace and Love
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Date: 3/21/2009 6:48:00 PM
I love your gentle voice, carrie, it is so beautiful. love your words, Kristin :)
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Date: 3/21/2009 4:46:00 PM
Indeed, without us all Ms. Carrie, at some point or another. Yet, I can tell you are aware of and appreciate so much of every moment, and every gift bestowed upon us while we are here. I especially love the 'chanting from valleys deep and echoes of time casting shadows'. A beautiful poem, rich in awareness. Love, Shar P.S. (could not find anything to wear except a little black party dress - how inappropriate - but pretty!) Will keep trying. xoxo
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Date: 3/21/2009 11:09:00 AM
the ending is so true-- wonderfully expressed-- sad to dwell on--
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Date: 3/21/2009 9:52:00 AM
The ending to this piece really made me sad...the idea of the clock ticking and yet it carries on without life..no source to direct about direction of the day...I love this piece Carrie, but I can't help but feel a theme of emptiness running throughout....
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Date: 3/21/2009 9:28:00 AM
Time is indifferent to man's life, Carrie. This is a very wise observation in a hauntingly beautiful poem!
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Date: 3/21/2009 8:47:00 AM
I can feel time slip away with every line in this poem, Carrie, very well done! Jim
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Date: 3/21/2009 8:11:00 AM
A clock so indifferent, what an awesome way to describe the callousness of time. My boys are teens so close to walking away on their own quests with time. If only, if only, if only the same question asked forever, why can't we know then what we know now. To experience and feel and need in the present. Let tomorrow and yesterday go,,and stop preaching Laurie Ginn. wuvs ya Carrie
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