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I'm lost at sea and weary So tossed upon the tides Aged sinews and I'm leery Of threats this reef abides And yet there is a comfort Within the gorging breaks To run aground And wash up In your Ruins ... Forsaken midst the desert On sands as hot as stars I ache for highland heather The broken rills and scars And yet I find it's peaceful Along the plangent dunes To melt away And vanish In your Ruins ... Misplaced deep in the jungle Its beryl bloom and breath Through labyrinths I bungle While cheating proper death Still, I've found contentment Dwells in that tangled wood So lay me there To molder In your Ruins ... Oh ... How I long To crumble In your Ruins. * This is a poetic form I created that is called, simply, “FLUSARIAT” - I hope you found it worth your while! * ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Strand Special Any Form, Any Theme, Any Number Of Lines" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "N/A Rerun 2" Poetry Contest, John Hamilton, Judge & Sponsor. ( N/A'd on June 26, 2019 in the "Move Me" Poetry Contest )

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Date: 12/11/2019 7:21:00 AM
Very nice!
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Date: 12/11/2019 12:09:00 AM
Wow Greg, this is outstanding! Congratulations on your very deserving First Placement! : ) xxoo
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Date: 12/10/2019 9:38:00 PM
Now this roster surely was not turned upside down. Congrats, Gregory, on your top win in Brans contest with this winding, breathtaking wrte! Seasons best, Gershon
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Date: 12/10/2019 8:14:00 PM
Congrats on your winning poem Greg
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Date: 8/11/2019 12:22:00 PM
wow, Gregory. OUtstanding work and well deserved win! Congratulations.
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Date: 8/10/2019 10:07:00 PM
A beautiful moving piece. Lyrical and pure gold. Congrats on your first place.
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Date: 8/10/2019 7:28:00 PM
I was completely moved by the emotionally expressive language and metaphorical beauty of this poignant gem. It was a pleasure to return for another read, Gregory, and to offer you my congratulations for your excellent win. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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Date: 8/10/2019 7:04:00 PM
Who could not be moved by this splendor Greg! I love the nostalgic feeling of being drawn to ruins where once in another time you may have dwelled. This is astonishingly beautiful and certainly worthy of your first placement! Congratulations my friend! : ) xxoo
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Date: 8/10/2019 6:14:00 PM
Well I can't imagine this one not placing but hey, every judge has it's own criteria, MY criteria says PURE GOLD! Congrats G, you were smart to enter this one you knew it was a fave.
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Date: 6/21/2019 10:10:00 PM
Back for a second read and it's better this time, like Nina I gotta fave this beauty!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/8/2019 3:39:00 AM
Many kind thanks to you, John - it never placed, but these comments are prize enough! Blessings! :o)
Date: 6/18/2019 8:20:00 AM
It moved me! Your sure to see a first place trophy! Hugs...Kim
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/19/2019 1:39:00 AM
Oh, I never count on such things ... too many N/A's for that, lol. But thank you so much, Kim, I'm glad you liked it and see it as worthy! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 6/16/2019 11:16:00 AM
Masterful writing G, loved every word, Rick should enjoy this one!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/19/2019 1:38:00 AM
Many kind thanks, John - I'm so pleased you like it, Brother! :-)
Date: 6/15/2019 9:20:00 PM
Your poem is breath-taking in every way, Gregory. A metaphoric beauty! Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you.. ~Susan
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/19/2019 1:37:00 AM
That's very kind of you, Susan, and I so appreciate and value your opinion. Blessings, Dear Poet! :-) <3 (I just discovered that I never entered it, lol ... barely got it in!)
Date: 6/15/2019 7:39:00 PM
Absolutely stunning, Gregory. Bravo.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/19/2019 1:36:00 AM
Thank you very much Line! :-) <3

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