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4 Lines from Any Song Contest       January 11, 2024

Sponsored by Joseph May

You're too deep in, you can't get out Of a river of emotions, and you're drowning without a doubt, holding on to love's devotions. Tragic, when your whole world is black. You're too deep in, you can't get out. Memories hurt when they flashback. Is this what heartache's all about? Thirsting for love, but there's a drought. Anguish is your gut reaction. You're too deep in, you can't get out and can't get no satisfaction. You cry, "Look at me, I'm shattered!" With anger and regret you shout, "Love was everything that mattered!" You're too deep in, you can't get out. ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ You're too deep in, you can't get out ~ Rolling Stones * Emotional Rescue When your whole world is black ~ Rolling Stones * Paint it Black Can't get no satisfaction ~ Rolling Stones * Satisfaction Look at me, I'm shattered ~ Rolling Stones * Shattered

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Date: 2/11/2024 4:43:00 AM
"Emotions overflow when heartache comes", Very nicely done Lin, Congrats on your win
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Date: 2/11/2024 8:35:00 AM
Morning, and thank you very much for finding a place on your list for my poem, Joseph. I'm grateful.
Date: 1/11/2024 4:10:00 PM
Lin, a great poem, very clever and creative and I enjoyed your reference to the Rolling Stones, brilliant!
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Date: 1/12/2024 8:28:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Tania.
Date: 1/11/2024 1:17:00 PM
Nice take on the contest theme Lin,
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Date: 1/12/2024 8:28:00 AM
Thank you very much, John.
Date: 1/11/2024 12:39:00 PM
Some great lines here Lin, and a wonderful compilation of Stones songs, you make them fit together quite seamlessly, I think you will get some satisfaction from this one, cheers David
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Date: 1/12/2024 8:27:00 AM
lol David. I already have based on the comments. That's a win for me. Thanks a bunch.
Date: 1/11/2024 12:20:00 PM
Great job, Lin. Very creative! Great band also. Good luck!
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Date: 1/12/2024 8:27:00 AM
Thanks a lot, Danny. I was sure you'd appreciate it with your love of music.
Date: 1/11/2024 11:14:00 AM
oh golly gosh Lin I got a lot of satisfaction reading this gem, you wove the lines in so wonderfully - shame i cant get any satisfaction with my fickle muse - wrote 5 poopy poems for next book but as for serious my muse says noooo noooo nooo:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/12/2024 8:26:00 AM
I'm glad you liked it Jan. I thought this would be a contest that needed a LOT of thinking, but I started with 'Satisfaction' and it seemed to all fall into place. Thanks, Chick.
Date: 1/11/2024 10:43:00 AM
Lin, your poem explores the experience of being consumed by intense emotions, particularly the negative aspects of love such as heartache, regret, and longing. It delves into the feeling of being unable to break free from the grip of these emotions and the impact it has on the individual. Well composed my friend.
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Date: 1/12/2024 8:25:00 AM
Thanks, Lasaad. You've covered every emotion planted in these lines. "What's love got to do with it?" asked Tina... everything.
Date: 1/11/2024 9:27:00 AM
A creative write. Good job with the songs. Good Luck... Have Blessed day writing away.......................
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Date: 1/11/2024 9:32:00 AM
Paula, thank you for the many kind comments you offer my poetry.
Date: 1/11/2024 8:48:00 AM
absolutely creative! I enjoyed how you used phrase from different Rolling Stones songs...brilliant in fact. How descriptive your poem was of the desperation, the pain and the anguish one feels when in too deep, emotions drowning you. Outstanding poem....best wishes with the contest, hugs, Sara
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Date: 1/11/2024 9:05:00 AM
Thanks so much, Sara. It's not a new way of thinking for me... unfortunately. My mind instantly thought of the Stones, and this was the result. I'm glad you like it. That makes two of us. ;-)

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