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In the Throes of Dying Love

In the Throes of Dying Love In the throes of dying love, you’re a fallen angel, with no celestial saving grace. Rose-tinted glasses shattered, you’re no longer my hero, just a stark-naked zero. You besmirch every passing season that we shared…hacking them down, one by one, like ugly unwanted weeds in your garden. And my hope for a new you faded with the waning silver of the moon. You’ve lost your lissome, school-boy charms; and the power to pinion me with your cold, mesmerizing eyes, those squinting black holes that once sucked me in…trying to suffocate me. Your love is just as phony as your painted-on smile, and that old forged, water-color painting of a loving couple, that I found buried under dust and cobwebs in the attic. But as that ancient, worn-out sun sinks to repose, in the dense, oblivion of dark firmament, so has our sojourn ended…and I’ve forgotten why I loved you in the first place. Sadly, like that cheap wedding ring you bought me, you’re irrelevant…in the throes of dying love. 05-22-2018 Contest: Eight Word Challenge – 4 Poetry Contest Sponsor: John Hamilton Placement: 3rd 8 Words: throes, celestial, besmirch, pinion, lissome, repose, firmament, sojourn

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Date: 7/11/2018 10:15:00 PM
Pandita my sweets your pen have got a knack to write these scenes. Excellent
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 7/11/2018 10:40:00 PM
Hi Al, thank you, my friend for your superlative comments and compliments which I enjoy receiving! Hope you had a lovely day! Best regards. Pandita
Date: 6/20/2018 9:13:00 AM
Another great poem you have gifted us my friend. I see congrats are in order for a top win with this excellent creation! A fav...
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Date: 6/20/2018 9:15:00 AM
Hello Robert, it is always a unique pleasure to hear from you! I so very much appreciate your kind supportive words! Thank you for stopping by my friend. Best regards and hugs. Pandita.
Date: 6/9/2018 10:30:00 PM
Well done, Pandita. Congrats on your top win.
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Date: 6/10/2018 9:38:00 PM
Thank you very much, my friend, for your kind congratulatory words and compliments! Hugs and best regards. Pandita
Date: 6/8/2018 7:41:00 PM
Hey, I found a great poem here that I had somehow missed. Very good work, Pandita and congrats for your win.
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Date: 6/8/2018 9:14:00 PM
Hello Andie, I so very much appreciate your kind supportive words! Thank you for stopping by my friend. Best regards and hugs. Pandita.
Date: 6/6/2018 1:20:00 PM
can't believe I missed this powerfully penned poem, it sure packs a punch Pandita:-) many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 6/6/2018 1:23:00 PM
Awwwww! Thank you my dear Jan, that means a lot to me! Hope you are enjoying a beautiful day! Love and hugs. Pandita
Date: 6/6/2018 9:11:00 AM
It appears the judge also appreciates your artistry. Congrats on a fine win.
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Date: 6/6/2018 10:43:00 AM
Hi Richard, thank you so much, my friend for your sweet words and congratulations! Have a great day! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 6/4/2018 11:38:00 PM
Back to say congratulations on your win with this explosive/healing poem. A fave this time after reading again. Excellent expression and writing.
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Date: 6/6/2018 10:38:00 AM
Dear Susan, thank you for returning with your kind congratulatory words and fave! Have a lovely day! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 6/4/2018 7:47:00 PM
Great use of the 8 words and, Pandita, with great imagery ; congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
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Date: 6/4/2018 8:12:00 PM
Hi Eve, thank you very much, my friend for your kind congratulatory words and compliments! Hugs and best regards. Pandita
Date: 6/4/2018 2:52:00 PM
Dropping back with my Congrats
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Date: 6/4/2018 8:10:00 PM
Thank you so much, Joseph! I always appreciate you! Hugs and best regards. Pandita
Date: 6/4/2018 11:15:00 AM
This was an excellent write Pandita, congrats on a fine top placement!
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Date: 6/4/2018 8:09:00 PM
Hi John, I am very happy to be on the winners' list! Thank you very much! Hugs and best regards. Pandita
Date: 6/2/2018 1:35:00 PM
A powerful write Pandita, a dying love exploding in the firmament...best wishes
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Date: 6/2/2018 8:18:00 PM
Hello Joseph, I so very much appreciate your kind supportive words! Thank you for stopping by my friend. Best regards and hugs. Pandita.
Date: 6/1/2018 3:34:00 PM
Awesome Pandita, when the sparkle in the eye of a loved one dims, it is a sign to move on...Love this one! If this relates to you my dearest friend, I hope only but the best for you...Have a lovely weekend...Hugs // Charlie :)
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Date: 6/2/2018 9:52:00 AM
Hey Charlie, thank you, my friend for your superlative comments and compliments which I enjoy receiving! Hope your weekend isf bright with lots of sunshine! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 5/31/2018 3:56:00 PM
Let me get this straight, I take it you don't like this guy anymore??? Well done Pandita, best wishes in the contest...
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Date: 6/2/2018 9:44:00 AM
Hi Charlie, :-) - that's right - he's gone with the wind - hehehehe. Thank you, my friend for your always kind support! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 5/31/2018 2:05:00 PM
Great write with the required words! GL on contest!
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Date: 5/31/2018 2:56:00 PM
Thank you very much, dear Kim! i appreciate your kind words! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 5/31/2018 8:51:00 AM
You made great use of your 8 words. I expect this will do very well.
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Date: 5/31/2018 10:25:00 AM
Hello Richard, I so very much appreciate your kind supportive words! Thank you for stopping by my friend. Best wishes always. Pandita.
Date: 5/29/2018 4:50:00 PM
A pack a powerful punch, Pandita, awesome poetry, love this...
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Date: 5/31/2018 10:22:00 AM
Thank you very much, Harry, for your visit and uplifting, supportive compliments/comments which I greatly appreciate! Hugs. Pandita.
Date: 5/24/2018 2:18:00 PM
This "Dying Love" has quite a living KICK; lots of reactions to the past. What about NOW (don;t take me too seriously, but congrats Wonderful Princess Poet). shalom, shalom
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Date: 5/24/2018 3:19:00 PM
:-) When love dies like that, at the time the beloved becomes "irrelevant" you know you are in a better place to move on! Thank you dear, Anil! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 5/23/2018 10:39:00 AM
You did this challenge very well and used the words to great poetic detail.. Great poetry Pandita..
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Date: 5/23/2018 3:58:00 PM
My dear friend, it is so wonderful to hear from you again! I hope you are doing well - relaxed and enjoying life! Thank you so much for visiting and for your sweet compliments! Hugs and love. Pandita
Date: 5/23/2018 9:32:00 AM
Pandita, I think you made such excellent use of the words to tell your story. Well done and Good Luck in the Contest, I am sure you will do well xxoo
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 5/23/2018 4:01:00 PM
Hi Mike, these words were indeed challenging - I had to dig deep to conceptualize and craft a cohesive piece:-)! Thank you very much for your lovely compliments! Hugs. Pandita
Date: 5/23/2018 6:27:00 AM
Excellent from start to finish, Pandita. All your poems are a pleasure to read. This will win BIG.
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Date: 5/23/2018 8:21:00 AM
My friend Vijay, I thank you kindly for your sweet complimentary words which mean so much to me! Hope you are enjoying a beautiful day! Best regards. Pandita
Date: 5/22/2018 4:52:00 PM
Awesome how you did this!!! Smoothly used the 8 words in your poetry expressing real hurt that is displayed with anger and disgust. Excellent! Can't go by me, but I think it should be on the top of the winners list.
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Date: 5/23/2018 8:19:00 AM
Susan, what beautiful words and sentiments! Susan, I am so appreciative of your wonderful compliments and delighted that you enjoyed this very special piece! Thank you kindly, my friend! Pandita
Date: 5/22/2018 3:48:00 PM
Great verse using all eight words Pandita. A sad tale of a love turned sour. Good luck in the contest. Tom.
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Pandita Sietesantos
Date: 5/22/2018 3:52:00 PM
Hi Tom, thank you so much for visiting and leaving your insightful comment and lovely compliments as usual! Truly it's always sad when love turns sour! Best regards. Pandita

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