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In the Dark

The darkness hides me, no one can see, no one can hear my heart and I feel safe because of my new-found invisibility; I’m cold, alone and unforgiven. All products of my weakness… let my penance wash over me like a flagellant’s whip; the blood bubbles through each piercing and flows off my back forming a sinful red pool of guilt and remorse. The masked wooden faces that stare down at me mock my gestures with silence, they are my only witnesses but they’ll never tell about my madness. Depression is a heavy cloak, it comes down hard like the night my only reprieve is when the ghosts of dawn appear. Is it pride or fear that keeps us here? I’m not afraid anymore, there is comfort in the darkness, my silent friend. From here I can see the end. My life is a soap bubble… written 09/09/17 for the contest IN THE DARK

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Date: 11/14/2019 5:06:00 AM
Brilliantly written! X
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Phil Capitano
Date: 11/15/2019 8:24:00 AM
Thanks Elaine, always good to hear from you. Have a great day.
Date: 9/30/2017 2:32:00 PM
Hello Phil, With this riveting verse -- I shall say that darkness doth truly pervade here!! The imagery is very powerful and quite descriptive. I thoroughly enjoyed your superb write here in every respect!! Cheers and Best, Gary
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Date: 9/22/2017 8:32:00 PM
Hello Phil, you wrote a beautiful poem. I like the way the words flow together. Have a nice evening my friend.
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Date: 9/21/2017 9:56:00 AM
A stupendous write my friend...darkness personified...welcome to my corridor lol...god bless...^WW^
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Phil Capitano
Date: 9/21/2017 4:50:00 PM
Thanks for the great comment, I appreciate it. Namaste.
Date: 9/18/2017 12:18:00 PM
Nicely written Phil, suits the contest well.
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Phil Capitano
Date: 9/21/2017 4:52:00 PM
Thanks James, I hope the judge feels the same way. Ciao.
Date: 9/15/2017 11:24:00 AM
The trailing unsaid tragic words ... bubble that burst ... is so sad, but this poem is a neo-classic, Phil. Profound in it's emotional intensity. Glowing dark poetry. Love and joy always.
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Phil Capitano
Date: 9/15/2017 12:46:00 PM
Thanks Freddie, when I write darkly I have to go to that place of pain and it takes a lot to get back to balance. Namaste my friend.
Date: 9/14/2017 10:32:00 PM
Mark my words Phil, this is a winner...and you know I'm usually right! This is true classic poetry...this one really speaks to me,especially lately... there is comfort in darkness, from here I can see the end...wow true depiction of depression.
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John Hamilton
Date: 9/24/2017 9:33:00 PM
Well I guess you know what that means...judging is subjective , it was a top 3 write in my books!
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Phil Capitano
Date: 9/22/2017 7:39:00 AM
Unfortunately Russell didn't think it rated in the top ten but thanks again for the support.
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Phil Capitano
Date: 9/15/2017 4:17:00 AM
Thanks John, sometimes you have to look down the rabbit's hole and believe me its no Wonderland.
Date: 9/14/2017 10:16:00 AM
this is a dark write Phil, interesting questions, I believe it is fear that keeps us alive, fear of not knowing....
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Phil Capitano
Date: 9/15/2017 4:18:00 AM
I believe you may be right. Thanks for the visit and comment.
Date: 9/14/2017 7:35:00 AM
Wow Phil that is an amazing entry for the contest. Well done.
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Phil Capitano
Date: 9/14/2017 7:50:00 AM
Thanks Heidi for your visit and comment. :)

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