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In the Clearing

two boys racing dash, dart, tear airburst in a clearing punched open arms of piston pumping disperse white funnels dandelion fluff curling scattering flowered stems as water streaked, streams down joyful faces clearing, a clawed out seclusion child claimed freedom unspooling in summer heat pulling back its gauzy veil pushed to disarray in this seething space, holding promise two boys, breath weary, tumble into the tall grass laugh and roll, confessions shared like wanting to drift somewhere - imaginary to real claiming turf needing no repair stories whispered before they're pushed off the page in a green clearing, its window-heavy future till tall tales take a different slant to rest like beaded sweat upon lined brows Poem composed February 21, 2023

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David Drowley

Date: 6/29/2023 10:19:00 AM

Brian, Congratulations on your win! I really liked "stories whispered before they're pushed off the page."

Brian Sambourne
Date: 6/29/2023 10:27:00 AM

Hello David, thank you kindly for your congratulatory note on my poem. One image lead to the write - two boys racing through a field. Best wishes, Brian

Sam Kauffman

Date: 6/27/2023 11:29:00 AM

Brian, your word pairings, images and scenic imagery are, simply put, articulated with a master's pen! Congratulations on your trophy win with this outstanding poem. It is truly an honor to share the podium with your poetic art of innocence flowing into maturity through childhood memories! Blessings! Cheers

Brian Sambourne
Date: 6/27/2023 5:19:00 PM

Greetings Sam, Thank you for your most thoughtful appraisal of my posting. You've expressed my intention precisely - "innocence flowing into maturity." Your insights are spot on. Be well. With appreciation, Brian

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 6/27/2023 5:04:00 AM

This is definitely a fave. I love it! Congrats! Great writing. God bless you. Love, Gina

Brian Sambourne
Date: 6/27/2023 5:29:00 AM

Thank you Gina, for seeing merit in my work. Much appreciation. Be well. Sincerely, Brian

Gary Radice

Date: 6/27/2023 12:54:00 AM

Such joy when play came complete with a serving of naive - but joyful - ignorance of life's real rules and news. Anything was possible. Even freedom. (My take, anyway) Love this Brian. Deserved recognition from Brian's contest and beyond for a truly great work. Cheers - Gary

Brian Sambourne
Date: 6/27/2023 5:35:00 AM

Hi Gary, Nothing like the freedom and hope of youth to spill over + push one's pen. To move from innocence to experience is certainly a well trod path. Thank you for your message of congratulations. Best wishes, Brian

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/6/2023 10:12:00 AM

I see this lovely write was a winner. "Congratulations" Have a great day writing away................

Brian Sambourne
Date: 4/6/2023 12:41:00 PM

Hi Paula, You are such a much appreciated, supportive poet here on Poetrysoup. Thank you for your affirmative note. Best wishes, Brian

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 2/26/2023 8:36:00 AM

a well deserved high placement for this excellent poem - i enjoyed the original use of language throughout - congrats on your win in the contest!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/26/2023 3:14:00 PM

My appreciation for your positive take on my "Clearing" poem, Charlotte. I may tweak it yet. Be well. Sincerely, Brian

Christuraj Alex

Date: 2/25/2023 7:53:00 PM

"till tall tales take a different slant" - beautifully written. Congratulations!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/25/2023 7:55:00 PM

Thank you, Christuraj, for your stop by + congratulatory message. Hope that you are well. Cheers Brian

Sotto Poet

Date: 2/25/2023 10:41:00 AM

Congratulations, Brian, for the winning achievement; your poem on clearing is so lovely, and I really liked the way your tale uses of metaphors.

Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/25/2023 3:30:00 PM

Your kind acknowledgement of my small poem is most appreciated, Sotto Poet. I was surprised by the high placement. Certainly not expected. Thank you again for your evaluation. Be well. Brian

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 2/25/2023 7:06:00 AM

A melancholy tale told so well! Congratulations on your win Brian. :)

Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/25/2023 7:28:00 AM

Greetings Linda. Most thoughtful of you to stop by + comment affirmatively. Overall, I see the boys' exuberant freedom meshing with the clearing - open + unburdened by tanglement. You are right, though, in that the final 4 lines suggest melancholy. With experience (+ time) we often struggle with confinement. Be well. Cheers Brian

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/22/2023 4:05:00 AM

Ahh!! Reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Children can enjoy such simple pleasures. I remember times when I did the same. Thanks for sharing and for stopping by my page. Sara

Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/22/2023 6:36:00 AM

Hello Sara, thank you for your vote of confidence. The presence of a clearing + two boys running through it suggested promise + freedom to my stodgy pen. Be well. Brian

Aysha Nuwas

Date: 2/21/2023 8:45:00 PM

Lovely poem!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/21/2023 9:04:00 PM

Thank you, Aysha. A newspaper pic, two boys in a heated run through a clearing became the impetus for this small piece. Be well. Brian