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In the Chilly Morn

there is a chirping in the leafless frozen woods, I hold out my hand and cold icy feathers land- there is both a fear and awe. ____________________ March 18, 2015 Poetry/Tanka/in the chilly morn Copyright Protected, ID 03-655-072-18 All Rights Reserved, 2015, Constance La France Submitted to the Standard Contest 261, sponsor, Poet Destroyer, Judged 2015 Eighth Place __________________________ Submitted to the Standard contest, Tanka #2, sponsor, Andrea Dietrich, Judged 2015 Sixth Place

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Mark Martin

Date: 1/13/2017 12:11:00 PM

The dilemma of wildlife - fear versus food! Congrats on your win BW! :-)

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 1/11/2017 10:01:00 AM

What a thought, outstanding, B.W., an eptiome of trust. Congrats on placing, should have been higher IMHO.

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 1/11/2017 3:00:00 AM

Very nice. Congratulations on your win. :) Hugs, Dane Ann

Afzal Nusker

Date: 1/11/2017 2:54:00 AM

Amazing tanka. You captured the feelings in such an interesting way. Congratulations, B.W.

Agnes Krampe

Date: 1/10/2017 6:40:00 PM

Lovely, especially the last line. Congrats on your placement.

Michael Dom

Date: 3/24/2015 12:21:00 PM

Glad to catch this feather from you, Broken. Congrats on this tanka.

Paul Callus

Date: 3/24/2015 10:21:00 AM

Hi Const! The lovely imagery and that great final line make this a most welcome Tanka. Congrats ... very merited! // paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/23/2015 1:35:00 PM

Broken, congratulations on your fine win for your Tanka! Hugs, Sandra

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/22/2015 1:56:00 PM

BROKEN, Congratulations on your awesome TANKA 2 win Always & Forever <3 Luv ~LINDA~

Edward Ebbs

Date: 3/22/2015 12:37:00 PM

I really like this, imagery is great, congrats :) PS - I hope it warms up their soon!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/21/2015 9:25:00 PM

Constance, this was a cool little story you told. Where the cold icy feathers land in your hand! If you would have given me something like an action in that last line, and not just said you had fear and awe, I think I would have put this in top three!! Hope that makes sense to you. Congrats for your win.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 3/20/2015 8:52:00 PM

Love this tanka, captured and surpassed the image it draws.

Viv Wigley

Date: 3/19/2015 10:21:00 AM

You have captured an all too rare, intimate moment beautifully. Deserves to win. Viv

James Peranteau

Date: 3/19/2015 12:26:00 AM

That is sooooo beautiful dear poet ! Wow....we have finches here simular to the one in the photo you posted, they are called Golden finches here. And these words of yours are splendid, I kid you not ! Have a wonderful Spring Constance......much love, james

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/18/2015 10:33:00 PM

A heartwarming scene you have portrayed with your words Constance. Beautiful!

Emile Pinet

Date: 3/18/2015 1:17:00 PM

This is very beautiful and so well penned. Emile. #7

Abdelwaheb Dhaou

Date: 3/18/2015 12:39:00 PM

Enchanting piece Broken Wing ! I really exhilarated !