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In Response To My First Poem

In Response To My First Poem -Inner Spirit- A true and fighting spirit within us all surely must lay beneath this weak armor made of water and clay. Has it been destroyed in your life and soul, by seeking comfort, pleasure and another goal? Waken it if it still remains to be used for greater good stop playing the excuse of, if only I ever could ! Renew that gifted spirit to stiffen the weakened spine, take strong stands and draw many a hard line. Truly sad that we get only one weak human life to live, copy virtue , kindness and learn to sacrifice and give. Be noble in courageous thought as well as in all your deeds courage often springs from the smallest of little seeds! 04-26-2014 ~ ~~ ~ My Response He remained true to a dedicated and uplifting vow Although, a weak vessel made of red cracking clay. Years had taken a slashing toll, in great pain now Yet his huge heart still sang out in its own way! That terrible destruction time always seems to wreck Dark, sad seeds planted in so many weakening souls. Such looming obstacles hindered his long, lonely trek Prayed he each day with faith to reach all his goals! As many did in truth point out his stinging defeats He begged pardon, crying his heart did remain true. Only after helping others in their successful feats Could his heart and soul celebrate with all of you! Shining inner spirit, resting most secure in his mind Watching as his last candle flickered and burned out. Forever praying that deep love and faith all may find Lights flashing, he flew away at the first angel's shout! 09-28-2015 For 12th Contest, Sponsored by Silent One "Response To Your First Poem"

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Date: 10/24/2015 9:53:00 PM
Robert, I prefer the first poem, especially the first two lines of the first stanza. Life does put a damper on the creative spirit within us – writers block. In the nearly 20 years of writing poetry I've only experienced a few short days of writers block. Thanks for posting the poem and thanks for stopping by to read mine. Best to you in your writing endeavors. /M
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Date: 10/4/2015 5:09:00 PM
Robert, this is so reflective of your genius - to possess the skill and creativity to respond so excellently to your first poem! Brilliant and a 7! I continue to learn from you! Pandita
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Date: 10/2/2015 9:28:00 PM
good to finally see this one, Robert. You chose well your older poem to respond to and came up with an equally good poem. Congrats on your win, my friend.
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Date: 10/2/2015 12:58:00 AM
Robert, Congratulations on the response to your first poem ***SKAT
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Date: 10/1/2015 4:14:00 PM
Interesting lines penned..Enjoyed reading today..Congrats on your win..Sara
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Date: 10/1/2015 9:38:00 AM
You are so good with rhyme, Robert. :) Lovely ending. Congrats on your fine win, my dear.
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Date: 10/1/2015 8:20:00 AM
A n epic write Robert, congratulations.
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Date: 10/1/2015 1:24:00 AM
Wonderful poem Robert n so is the win! Big congrats! Loved to read the amazing thoughts in the first poem as well!
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Date: 10/1/2015 1:16:00 AM
I particularly like the last line of your Response. Congratulations on your win, Julia
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Date: 9/30/2015 10:31:00 PM
Robert, your shining inner spirit will always remain lit! Congrats on your win!
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Date: 9/30/2015 8:43:00 PM
Robert excellent win. Congratulations!
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Date: 9/30/2015 7:08:00 PM
Robert, I loved how his inner spirit continued to shine and prevail over time. An Excellent write and win! Congrats! Hugs
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Date: 9/30/2015 6:58:00 PM
Robert, I'm glad to see this moving piece in the winner's circle. Congratulations on your win:-)Alexis
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Date: 9/30/2015 4:27:00 PM
A powerful first poem and a wonderful response many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 9/28/2015 11:17:00 PM
Robert,This is such a heartfelt response to your first poem. Your concern for mankind shines bright in them both.Good luck in the contest:-)Alexis 7
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Robert Lindley
Date: 9/29/2015 9:51:00 AM
Every poet that writes from deep in the heart has honored poetry by doing so. Thanks my friend..
Date: 9/28/2015 9:30:00 PM
Wonderful response poem. Good luck in the contest.
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Robert Lindley
Date: 9/29/2015 9:49:00 AM
Thanks Dan.....

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