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In Our Minds

IN OUR MINDS We keep the illegality of it in our minds, with abated breath, we stand outside as they rifle the room, to find what we both know they will never find. The lady and I, follow closely behind them, back down the winding, staircase, lustful whispers still smelling on our breath. One of the searchers bend to retrieve something, a few of our words might have fallen in the cracks on the floor. Panting from the fear and thrill of dangling over the 200 feet drop-off of the sharpened, white cliffs, freedom, a wanton child hanging around the ajar door In this illicit game, the spin you and I put on fate, the crazy spin to become newly discovered planets, held tightly in our fist, waving the patent in the air, And we keep it in our minds, as we had long shaken off the searchers, their torchlight, shinning on the silhouette of the wrong sand dune, On this safe plateau now, looking down on their furtive torches, flickering, flickering in circles.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 8/31/2015 3:13:00 AM
- A great poem, Eaton ! - With smiles and joy I welcome you to P-Soup :) - Hope you will find this poem page interesting and post many more poems in the future - Have a great experience together here with us in "the poems world" - I wish you every success - // Anne-Lise :)
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Eaton Jackson
Date: 8/31/2015 12:08:00 PM
Thanks again.
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Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/31/2015 11:55:00 AM
- I've learned a lot here ..... writing poetry for me is a hobby and a pleasure :))) - Good luck from Norway // Anne-Lise :)
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Eaton Jackson
Date: 8/31/2015 11:47:00 AM
Thanks' Anne Lise for your welcome and for your appraisals and comment on my posting. I pretty new to this so I will try to feel my way through, encourages with the knowledge that there is an existing community of practitioners of words, whose critique can only help me grow. thanks again.
Date: 8/30/2015 3:10:00 PM
Hi Eaton, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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Eaton Jackson
Date: 8/31/2015 12:02:00 PM
Hi SKAT A, thanks for your welcome. I am a Jamaican, resident in the United States since 2011. I have been writing poetry for most of my adult.I have been published in Jamaican newspaper, when I was living there. After numerous submissions, I am yet to be published in an American publications. At this point I am lacking confidence as a writer. Although poetry is a universal language, I have not been able to impress editor, that I can speak that language. So, out of a need for some measuring device, I created an account and decided to post a few poems. I always crave the indulgence of fellow writers. I will continue to post and read carefully your critique and appraisals.
Date: 8/30/2015 12:26:00 PM
Eaton, WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy Poetry Soup:) Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Eaton Jackson
Date: 8/31/2015 12:05:00 PM
Thanks Poet Destroyer for your kind welcome. I am heartened too to be in a community of writers. I will continue to post and try to improve my craft. Thanks again.

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