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In Another Time

She asked for five more minutes but only stayed for three her eyes are filled with sadness for a world that cannot see the pain within her heart was paid with somber tears dreams remaining distant leaving only fears. Thoughts crash through a war destroying all who pass afraid of what should happen if we felt free to ask the questions that lay silent inside our lonesome hearts when peace goes off to war and never seems to last. Yet still we cling to memories of those who've met their end and ask for many moments that God cannot send.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 7/16/2016 12:36:00 AM
Victoria, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 7/13/2016 4:54:00 AM
A lovely, poignant piece and a super first submission to the site. Welcome, Victoria, to Poetry Soup. I'm sure that you will find your stay with us informative, educational and fun, and will meet a nice bunch of fellow wordsmiths. Enjoy. Viv x
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Date: 7/12/2016 10:06:00 PM
Victoria, Welcome to poetry soup, after reading this I feel as if you are an Accomplished writer. Glad to see you enjoying it so much here. Flourishing among this community is easier than you think. Keep up the good work. *SKAT*
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Date: 7/12/2016 4:01:00 PM
excellent poem;congratulations
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Date: 7/12/2016 3:59:00 PM
Wonderful poem Victoria.
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