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In a Pique

In these deep woods, poetry brews rich dark Like dark coffee, acidic on tongue_ cheek I could say deep dark remarks on tales embark Write poem, for you have put me in a pique From the deep dark forest draw ravens black Let them feed upon your brain's carrion For it is dead, vile, let them eat your flack Your cadaver brain is barbarian Refined gracious lady keeps loving Her spirit turns blind eye to all faults Nearly all faults_learning to be accepting Even when bombarded with rash insults These dark, dark woods forgive your wrong thinking Though in heart it's impact still affecting finis

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 7/7/2012 1:34:00 PM
It is indeed a fascinating poem when finished. I was expecting it to be this way, given your talent. A tribute to your pen. -Mohammad
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Date: 7/3/2012 12:56:00 PM
bold write , sara, and one that is an outpouring of your soul... you are on fire!..:) huggs!
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Date: 7/3/2012 5:35:00 AM
Strong writing, my friend. I can truly feel your being "in a pique!"
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Date: 7/3/2012 5:10:00 AM
very nice writing ,i can see it and feel it,,thank you for the kind words inon my poem pace maker,and yes its a true poem that is happining right now in my life ,thank you have a great day
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Date: 7/2/2012 9:31:00 PM
I enjoyed this immensely Mrs. Sara. I think we can relate. I digress though, one experiences things differently from another. I think the first two lines in the first stanza are my favorite, though it is all extremely well written. Thank you for sharing.
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Date: 7/2/2012 8:23:00 PM
a most outstanding and elegant write Sara.. beautiful and well constructed .. best wishes if for a contest luv..
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Date: 7/2/2012 4:33:00 PM
An amazing write with elegant metaphors. Morning shows the day. It will be a fascinating poem when finished. As always your heartwarming comments on my poem Heart's Desire are profound and thought provocative. I am impressed by your sensibility and vision. What you say about the quality of love is so true. Dear Sara you are great. -Mohammad
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Date: 7/2/2012 3:52:00 PM
This is a wondrous write even if you haven't finished it yet! What a remarkable poem full of great images for the mind to absorb! I enjoyed this a lot, the rich dark thoughts! Great Work!!
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Date: 7/2/2012 3:33:00 PM
Only for a moment I pray Sara. Peace and blessings.
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Date: 7/2/2012 3:14:00 PM
As usual Sara.....you are unique !!! - love Anne-Lise
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