In a Perfect World

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If I could live in a perfect world where nothing would be strange and nothing would be spoiled, Could that be easy to arrange? If my house were built upside down and I entered from the roof, I would be a perfectly happy clown but you would think I'm a goof. The eye of perfection to me may not be what you condone, but I would find happiness if ice cream came in a larger cone. I think it would be 'toadly' riveting if frogs hunted us for our legs and humans would start ribbitting when in our coffee we found dregs. My perfect world would be mellow if I painted it with my brush I could make the oceans yellow and on me all guys would have a crush. Perfection! It's like beauty to the eye of anyone who wants to behold. All you need to do to give it a try is allow your imagination to be bold. <><><><><><><><><><><><> 2/12/16

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White Sage

Date: 2/16/2016 5:43:00 PM

your world, am sorry to say is awesomely terrific, like some 3D thriller, you know, i'd agree with the ice cream part, but that upside down house and the others...oh, i would have preffered if cars could fly in the air, no, i mean if air could fly in cars, what am i saying? damn it! am not drunk though...but Lin, i can see a toad coming, and it has one leg, i got to run, fast! excellent one there Lin, you're one GODMOTHER OF IMAGINATIONS...best of luck in the contest

Lin Lane
Date: 2/17/2016 5:19:00 AM

I believe your imagination is way out there... Keep running. Thank you, Sage.

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 2/13/2016 2:00:00 PM

Smashing piece Lin, rather enjoyed this, really moves along so well taking one with it. Blessed indeed!

Lin Lane
Date: 2/13/2016 2:02:00 PM

Thank you very much, Gordon, for your kind comments.

Winged Warrior

Date: 2/12/2016 2:20:00 PM

I what to live in your world Lin...except I would change the part about the (guys) to gals...otherwise perfect world...with admiration...^WW^

Lin Lane
Date: 2/12/2016 5:18:00 PM

That would be a very good change to make in YOUR world, WW. Thanks for the great comments.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/12/2016 11:54:00 AM

I really like this, LIn. I just saw a blog Catie did about her dissatisfaction with her entries. I think you showed creativity in your poem. I hope you are one of the few that she really liked in her contest. Not sure I can even think what to do for a contest like this one, so I probably won't get one entered. Good luck, sweetie.

Lin Lane
Date: 2/12/2016 12:00:00 PM

Nope, I wrote one like the others since the Earth IS our world, so I removed it and wrote this off the wall bit. I always wanted to use "toadly" in a poem, so there it sits, on a lily pad., making me sing lalala. Thanks, Andrea.

Casarah Nance

Date: 2/12/2016 11:53:00 AM

Love your charming wit. Very nicely done Lin :)

Lin Lane
Date: 2/12/2016 11:56:00 AM

Thanks, Cas. She wants outside of the box, after writing this one I should be taped inside of the box..lol