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Immortal Footsteps

As a child learning to walk, I discovered stumbling, And now as an upright adult, I sometimes count back my previous steps, like the baby steps in your direction; Subconsciously, my feet always walk in the direction of attraction, And obviously spotted a winner in you; However this steady pace misread the time limit of your romance, And second place is where my feet currently reside; Although a religious woman, you don’t see the Adam and Eve complex between us, Rather you underestimate my advancement for mere friendship, And at best the status of a brother; I realize that your soul is blind, And these glasses of mine would fit perfectly, But you’d rather continuously wear unhealthy contact lenses; For this reason, my passion for walking has come to a halt; I sometimes reminisce on those last five steps I took, With every inch of courage, to eliminate the friendzone between us, And yet I’ll never recall the exact value of footsteps post-defeat, Which have remained immortal over the years; Friendship: such a two-faced gift, Heaven and Hell in one blessing.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 6/7/2020 8:34:00 AM
If it would not make her think, she would prove to be a disappointment. Somehow I don’t think that would be the case. ;0) Enjoyable to read again.
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Date: 3/21/2015 7:36:00 PM
Wow!!! You certainly have a very unique way of writing and taking the reader on a journey where they look at something in an entirely new way. Awesome writing, Jiril. And...thank you for commenting on 'Alice Through the Looking Glass'. Elaine
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Date: 3/21/2015 7:23:00 PM
I've never thought of friendship that way - but I can understand. Light & Love
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 3/21/2015 7:34:00 PM
Thank you, Debbie. Appreciate the love.
Date: 1/1/2015 9:19:00 AM
This is an impressive first offering. You have eloquently expressed your emotions. I wonder her reaction if she were to read this heartfelt piece?
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 1/1/2015 10:23:00 AM
Thank you Richard. Lol I'm not sure what her reaction would be, but I would hope this poem would at least make her think.
Date: 10/21/2014 10:05:00 AM
Yes, I agree, Jiril, There is a bit of heaven and hell in every relationship because not one of us is perfect. So we take the good with the bad. Otherwise, I think, we would have very few relationships. We think we can fix somebody to be more like we want them to be. But, good luck with that! Only God is perfect and He accepts me just as I am. Warts and all!
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 10/21/2014 11:12:00 AM
Thank you, Darlene.
Date: 10/12/2014 12:27:00 PM
A well deserved feature Jiril. Really liked this one, so descriptive the emotions...Sharon G.
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 10/12/2014 7:18:00 PM
Thanks Sharon.
Date: 10/11/2014 4:39:00 AM
Hi Jiril, Very deep poem. I'm sensing a dichotomy of philosophies of the individuals involved in the relationship. It seems to be branches off in alternate directions. Deep relationships are naturally complex. It is an interesting compelling work. Have a great day. Earl
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 10/11/2014 7:38:00 AM
Thanks Earl.
Date: 9/29/2014 8:37:00 PM
cryptically beautiful. I had to slow down while reading and let it catch up to me... Just as I did as a baby learning to walk... Jiril, I have been away fro the soup due to hip replacement and rehab.... I'm back now and have rediscovered your work... I'll be visiting more ..... Regards.... Jake
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 9/29/2014 8:44:00 PM
Thanks, John. Always appreciate the love.
Date: 6/8/2014 4:03:00 PM
Well written write on a not so well written relationship. Liked this, Jiril. Thanks for stopping by and paying me a visit.
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 6/8/2014 5:44:00 PM
Thank you Faye. Appreciate the love.
Date: 4/12/2014 6:11:00 PM
forbidden it was forbidden it shall be take new steps to a new path..... great write.... I did enjoyed this piece indeed.... Smiles and hugs.... Gina
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 4/12/2014 6:38:00 PM
Thank you Gina. Appreciate the love.
Date: 3/10/2014 8:22:00 AM
Soulful and deep!! Yeah, the "friendzone" is never good, stay out of it!! Well written piece here sir!! Hey, here are three poems I think you may enjoy. "Feverish", Ur Girl" & "Ur Man".. Let me know what you think!!Asavvy1
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 3/10/2014 2:52:00 PM
Thanks Jared. I'll check them out.
Date: 3/6/2014 2:40:00 AM
This is so touching and heartfelt..
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 3/6/2014 4:05:00 PM
Thanks Soulful. Appreciate the love.
Date: 1/8/2014 8:15:00 PM
I agree. Feel like I''ve been there.
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 1/8/2014 8:34:00 PM
Thanks Karen. Appreciate the love.
Date: 11/2/2013 11:42:00 PM
Jiril,.:-) Congratulations on having your poem featured on the HOME PAGE.... always~ LINDA
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 11/3/2013 8:30:00 AM
Thanks Linda, Appreciate it.
Date: 10/28/2013 12:28:00 AM
An agonizing dilemma indeed...you have clearly and cleverly expressed the feelings of the suffering soul involved in such a lop-sided relationship. I really like your poem.
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 10/28/2013 8:13:00 AM
Thanks Leo. Appreciate the love.
Date: 9/15/2013 1:31:00 PM
Great write, and beautiful poem! -Heather
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 9/15/2013 2:14:00 PM
Thanks Heather. Appreciate the love.
Date: 7/5/2013 9:02:00 PM
Jiril, I enjoyed reading your poem. You have a unique way with words. Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. Love, Kim
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 7/5/2013 9:16:00 PM
Thanks Kim. Appreciate the love.
Date: 7/4/2013 3:40:00 PM
yes I too wear rose colored glasses at times. I also think some friendships are better off as friendships and not turn into lovers..... thank you for reading and liking my Pitch Perfect Dreams ,,,, happy fourth of July ;}
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 7/4/2013 3:45:00 PM
Very true, Thanks for the response, Debbie. Happy 4th to you too.
Date: 7/3/2013 9:42:00 PM
Jiril....Which have remained immortal over the years....wow! Intense art! You write very well! Jimbo
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 7/3/2013 10:02:00 PM
Wow James, Thank you. I'm always appreciative of poets who understand the deepness of my poems. I'm sure your just as dedicated to yours.

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