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I'M Still Just a Baby

Blackened from the hole you burned on my sleeve, too many cigarettes you smoked, so hard to believe. Remorse and rejection held inside my morbid ashes, life keeps getting much harder the more time passes. I’m still just a baby in the eyes my mind created, everyone knows it too, so many times it’s been stated. One day I’m up, dying as I fall into the pit of hell, next day I’m down and everyone I know can tell. Even though I seem strong I am as weak as a bird, thoughts fading into unconsciousness, feeling unheard. Continuing with disregard filling voids with the bottle, onto the broken legged horse I ride on full throttle. Amnesia follows when I struggle to recall my coma, medication and herbal remedies with a terrible aroma. My near death experience has got the best of me, my breath can’t be breathed while living in misery. I need something to fill up my stupor tea cup, so I may attempt to find peace and drink it up. Fiction Written By: Laura Loo ~Date Written: May 2, 2016~

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 5/4/2016 2:57:00 AM
Excellent. Sad tale and deep write. Thanks for sharing it
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/4/2016 9:33:00 PM
thank you Ravi :)-luloo
Date: 5/3/2016 12:25:00 PM
what a formidable and sullen piece... though fictional, depression is a reality, lou... greeat stuff from you!..huggs
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Date: 5/4/2016 9:32:00 PM
thank you Nette :)-luloo
Date: 5/2/2016 4:11:00 PM
Such a sad tale, Laura Loo. I am glad to see it is fiction but unfortunately, somewhere in the world it is always going to be true for somebody out there.
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/2/2016 5:58:00 PM
yes it is fiction, and it's sad it happens to so many people -luloo
Date: 5/2/2016 10:25:00 AM
Powerful, Laura Loo. I do deal with depression, so I can relate to some of those lines. Blessings, dear.
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Lu Loo
Date: 5/2/2016 5:57:00 PM
always giving you well wishes! be blessed Eileen, many thanks :)-luloo

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