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I'M Losing My First Friend

When I see her my face drops All that I knew All that I dreamed for her So profoundly misplaced Deep in the pit of my soul She is my sister don’t you know When my tears fall like rivers And that thought of what my Mother to me sends shivers She was always there holding my hand How I cried when she left my side I would rush to the corner and weep and hide Now her life is shattered and fail My sister is absent of her color The rain has turned into hail She’s lost her way Day after day The drama and the scene She shakes with a trembling horror I just wish I could restore her To the sister I once knew Now the pills are her friends What a sad message it sends How can I watch her decline so hopelessly, and dear? I ‘m losing her I fear

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Jade Exit

Date: 4/21/2009 12:16:00 PM

oh man thats sad i dont really have anything awesome to say

Ernilando Tugaff

Date: 3/6/2009 8:50:00 AM

Hello Laura, this one is a very emotional piece of work. How sad and painful to see your loving sibling enslaved in this kind of situation. Let's pray for her anyway. Ernilando

Sue Mason

Date: 3/4/2009 3:17:00 PM

Addiction is a terrible trial for those it wounds along with the user!! Nar-Anon is a great program for families of addicts and of course Al-Anon for the families of alcoholics. This is a profound write here, Laura and you are very brave to share it with us. You don't have to be alone and your sister may find her way to health too.

Robin L. Gass

Date: 3/1/2009 7:17:00 PM

This is so heartfelt and beautifully written. The emotions are very powerful through this. How sad this situation this is and frustrating to watch. My prayers are with you. God bless you always. Love, Robin

Megan Kibler

Date: 3/1/2009 1:52:00 PM

Wow; you have a great emotional quality when you write that seems to come up in all of your pieces. That is really amazing

Farah Chamma

Date: 3/1/2009 11:31:00 AM

A very emotional write...Very powerful...Thank you for sharing Farah

Sammy Shaq

Date: 3/1/2009 8:39:00 AM

Emotional. Thoughtful. And happens in life that brings down. Addiction is something we should not fall for, yet the eyes we have make us see how true addiction can change the people you love. Sad.. but true. At peace, Sami. And thank you for the comment on my poem "New Generations". Merci.

Mary Duhart

Date: 3/1/2009 3:45:00 AM

Oh Laura how I can identify with this one. Nothing is worse than watching someone that is close to you be caught up in the addictions of this world. We will continue to pray for we know there is nothing to hard for our God. Hugs, love, and prayers...Mary

John Rhinem

Date: 2/28/2009 5:17:00 PM

....thus, I am sorry for Your pain in regards to Your sister dear!!!~But, keep writing and forging through it~as You shall do all which You can to help her "Priceless Life" I am sure!!!~Never lose hope in anything, and or "Prayer!!!"~And, I sincerely hope that You have "A Blessed and Beautiful Evening Laura!!!"~"Warmth and Love Always To 'You and Your Loves, Forever, John!!!"~Goodnight Dear Lady!!!:))

John Rhinem

Date: 2/28/2009 5:11:00 PM

Frown~what a very saddened moment this is for You dear~to watch one that You love so profoundly so, struggle through their life within such a dis-heartening way!!~"Hello Precious and Gifted Laura Mckenzie!!!"~You know, as I came to You just now, and started reading Your priceless words~it came over myself~how I consider Yourself a dear friend now!!! And, "Your Feelings Are My Own To Some Degree!!?"....cont....

Arany P.

Date: 2/28/2009 6:52:00 AM

so full of love this one... sorry about your friend!! have faith... this will only keep us going the extra mile... take care! ~ Arany

Sharon Winter

Date: 2/28/2009 5:17:00 AM

Laura, my heart breaks for you. There is nothing worse than watching someone you love suffer. The feeling of helplessness is overwhelming, the pain is unbearable. I will keep you both in my prayers. The emotion in this write is deeply moving and touches us all. With love, Shar

Raul Moreno

Date: 2/27/2009 8:28:00 PM

Remarkable Laura, this hit home, I have a friend in the same shoes. You captured the horrid scene I just wish we could just write these scenes out of imagination not from the people that are a part of our lives. It hurts I know, Just keep you prayers rising. God Bless you, your family, and your troubled friend...Raul

Lena Townsend

Date: 2/27/2009 7:58:00 PM

The emotions in this are well expressed though they are heart wrenching. I feel so close to the subject as I once lost a friend to overdose. She was like a sister to me. You are such a gifted writer. My heart really breaks for the subject here.

Laurie Ginn

Date: 2/27/2009 6:52:00 PM

What a painful write, your heart poured forth sadness in a beautiful way.

Christy Hardy

Date: 2/27/2009 6:40:00 PM

This just breaks my heart, the pain in your write is so real. If only loving someone could be enough to save them.....always, Christy

Michael Jordan

Date: 2/27/2009 6:36:00 PM

Laura it is always sad when a form of Addiction touches our lives - Hopefully things will work out - God Bless, MJ