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I'M Breaking Up With You - Pd's Contest

at the age of 2, i'm breaking up with you because you're a girl and you've got a disease [ew, cooties!] at the age of 12, i'm giving you hell because i found out you're nothing but just a tease at 22, i'm breaking up with you because i'm all grown up and got a new lease on life at 32, i'm breaking up with you because i'm blaming you for all my troubles and strife at 42, i'm breaking up with you because someone is going through their midlife crisis at 52, i'm breaking up with you because your loins no longer blessed by lady isis at 62, i'm breaking up with you because i've got the rest of my life to do what i want to do at 72, i'm breaking up with you because i'm past my prime and wasted my golden years on you at 82, i'm breaking up with you because you failed to save me your last dance at the age of 92, i'm breaking up with you because death doesn't give a second chance

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Justin Bordner

Date: 6/20/2014 1:52:00 PM

Sounds like you're in love Raven, breaking up to live it up with that love that's too tough to let go. I wonder if you'll break up with death to make with your true love. Xool and clever poem. J.A.B.

Malkavian Raven
Date: 6/22/2014 12:58:00 PM

Thank you, JAB. Oddly enough, this poem when originally written was a bit of foreshadowing for what is/was going on in my life at the moment. Just taking it one day at a time for now, reserving my strength to see it through to the end. Not sure where to go from there, once it's done... - Raven

Skat A

Date: 6/12/2014 5:13:00 PM

Malkavian, I love what you did here, I wish I could rate this poem with a 10 and not a seven. LOL, I love where you took the age and breakup theme. weeee you gave good reasons. Don't show this to my man. LOL.... SKAT

Malkavian Raven
Date: 6/12/2014 6:32:00 PM

Ski bi di bi di do bap do bap, SKAT! Thanks for the kind remarks and I'll do my best to keep it away from the prying eyes from the man. ;) ;) ;) Love & light. - Malkavian

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 6/12/2014 1:20:00 AM

Fantastic write and reasons for the break up. Malkavian

Malkavian Raven
Date: 6/12/2014 6:29:00 PM

Thank you, Doc. Pleasure hearing from you, as always. Love & light, brother. - Malkavian