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I'Ll Be Bauk

he's color blind does not find fault or mind her picks ————— see you in court! she retorted the short of it ————— star trek parsec wait a sec, what? non sequitur ————— low libido sees her, "whoa, son!" also rises ————— singular pun everyone missed save one, of course ————— Some first attempts at some Than-Bauk, will try again 3 lines, 4 syllables each: xxxa, xxax, xaxx

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L Milton Hankins

Date: 3/15/2022 1:56:00 PM

Nice efforts, Jeff. I could never get the hang of the Than-Bauk or understand the purpose of it. I prefer the Japanese haiku, senryu, and tanka. To each his/her own, however.

Jeff Kyser
Date: 3/15/2022 2:28:00 PM

There's not a lot to work with, is there? Although there's even less with a Lanterne, I think I like it better - at least the intent seems more clear, or as I interpreted it, to use the first 4 lines as clues to the 5th. With this one, the only one I felt like might have been close was the last one. But I'm taking your advice and sampling as many as I can!