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'if One Day'

If one day my wings forget to fly, Will you sweep me on the wind; remind them how to fly again? If one day my tears just trickle down, Will you catch them one by one? If one day my smile turns upside down, Will you mind sharing yours with me? If one day my color should fade away, Would you paint my day a brighter shade of grey?

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Lizanne Scholtz

Date: 1/11/2012 2:47:00 PM

Loved it, Congratulations on your Win Wilma. Elizabeth

Bl Devnath

Date: 1/9/2012 10:52:00 PM

Congratulation on your superb win, my friend. Loved and enjoyed your nice one. bl

Jon Arno

Date: 1/9/2012 10:09:00 PM

Congratulations on your great write. Best regards, Jon

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/9/2012 9:01:00 PM

this was quite unique, Wilma. I particularly liked the lines about wings and about a "brighter shade of grey!!" Congrats on your well deserved win.

Joyce Johnson

Date: 1/9/2012 10:01:00 AM

Poignant and touching. Congratulations Wilma. Love, Joyce

Bob Quigley

Date: 1/9/2012 8:47:00 AM

Beautiful Wilma. I love this. Congratulations

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 1/9/2012 8:17:00 AM

Congrats Wilma!!! I knew this would be on top,.... Your a wonderful poet and person... Luv Michael

Gwendolen Song

Date: 1/9/2012 7:54:00 AM

YES, the answer is YES to all of your questions in this poem...congrats on this special write, Wilma. Great job! GWendolen

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/9/2012 6:28:00 AM

Congratulations on you win in Brian's contest Wilma. Love, Carol

Audrey Haick

Date: 2/2/2011 1:31:00 PM

simply sweet and beautiful, Wilma..Reads like a pretty song! To my Favs. List today! Love, Annalise

Julie Heckman

Date: 1/30/2011 7:55:00 AM

Very nicely said. I like how you open each line with a question. It's so facinating that I've now read a poem from Nigeria. Thank you. Julie

Gert W. Knop

Date: 1/30/2011 7:24:00 AM

Hey Wilma, Wat 'n awesome skryf van jou! Baie emosionele en 'n pragtige beelde!...All die beste!...En dankie dat jy so baie vir altyd kommentaar te lewer my gedigte! ....Gert:)

Robert Pettit

Date: 1/30/2011 5:00:00 AM

Nicely written with some appropriate rhyming.

James Peranteau

Date: 1/30/2011 4:46:00 AM

A wonderful romantic write dear poet ! I just love this one ! Have a bright week Wilma! much love, james

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/29/2011 10:42:00 PM

wilma, just hurrying to go off and saw your comments to me. I appreciate that and hope to read more from you later. I hope you have some new ones up your sleeves! Joe is supposed to be walking in at any moment, from 11 hours driving and it's nearly midnight. LUv, Andrea

The Situation

Date: 1/29/2011 5:20:00 AM

i would paint your days with the colors of the rainbow. with all the creativity of the people that choose that this is red and this is blue, and this is green , and all the other hues. your shy of gray would turn sky blue. T. S.

Charles Henderson

Date: 1/29/2011 1:53:00 AM

Wilma please ck soup mail. charles

Kash Poet

Date: 1/28/2011 8:04:00 PM

This is a beautiful write full of passion Wilma!I liked it very much-kashinath

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 1/28/2011 1:50:00 PM

Lovely soft thoughts penned so well , Wilma

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 1/28/2011 1:40:00 PM

Im sure there is a line of eager men over there across the big sea just waiting to cover all those bases.. I know I would... lovely write as always my love...love to you from me Michael...

Charles Melody Lightning Ink

Date: 1/28/2011 11:10:00 AM

sweet rhetorical questions... if i am closer i will not fail to stand by you.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/28/2011 10:11:00 AM

YOu are so good at these kinds of poems, Wilma, making sweet questions about friends and lovers. I don't have many comments to see which if a good thing. My movie up in salt lake starts soon and I better be gone here fast! Lovely seeing your new poem. LUv, Andrea

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/28/2011 6:17:00 AM

Such a pleasant emotional piece Wilma my friend.. very sensitive and ultra romantic.. enjoyed with luv.. and our weather is quite horrendous and yours sounds awful too with flooding so destructive... we expect more snow as we fly out of here today at some point.. flights are all pushed back.. happy weekend..luv..

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/28/2011 6:06:00 AM

I need the last line...Great one..Very creative and descriptive work..Thanks for stopping by glad that you got a chuckle from the work "Canadian Geese"..Sara