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Idaho Sunset

Slate sky streaked with a painter's acid dream caresses the mountains, bleeding on their peaks. Cloud curtains lower, then rise, on an ever-changing psychedelic happening, but fracturing fingers of darkness pierce the canvas, draining the colors, drawing the curtains closed. 07/2015

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 8/1/2015 10:14:00 PM
Big congrats on your win! Sorry about the late reply. One reason that I so love poetry in that style is I can not do it!
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Date: 7/30/2015 4:10:00 PM
well done Mary loved the imagry, congratulations on your top tier win.
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Date: 7/30/2015 2:17:00 PM
Congrats on your winning poem, Mary!
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 2:24:00 PM
Thanks!
Date: 7/30/2015 1:35:00 PM
Congratulations. Your description of sunset is vivid right down to the descending darkness. SuZ
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 2:08:00 PM
thank you!
Date: 7/30/2015 11:05:00 AM
Mary, I would definitely melt if it was a Teas Sunset. :) Mary, this is a delight to read. I like the isolated crimson streaks falling with the night. I agree with Andrea's top choice. Congrats on your perfect win. LOVE LINDA"
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 11:12:00 AM
Thank you. And thank you for being specific about what you liked. It helps me grow as a writer.
Date: 7/30/2015 9:55:00 AM
So lovely !! And I love Idaho, some of my family live there, and would love this poem as much as I do !! :) Congratulations!
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 2:11:00 PM
Thank you for your kind comments.
Date: 7/30/2015 9:10:00 AM
This is nice. Very well done. Congrats.
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 11:14:00 AM
Thanks!
Date: 7/30/2015 7:40:00 AM
Wow, Mary, what a talent you exhibit!
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 2:11:00 PM
Very Kind. I am always open to criticism too. Helps me grow as a writer.
Date: 7/30/2015 7:03:00 AM
Great use of alteration, powerful imagery, very nicely done! :)
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 2:14:00 PM
Than you, Casarah. Now I will go look up alteration. lol
Date: 7/30/2015 3:32:00 AM
Mary, Congratulations on your SHWEET Free Verse Win. **SKAT**
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 2:15:00 PM
thanks
Date: 7/30/2015 1:55:00 AM
wow amazing imagery Mary many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 2:20:00 PM
I sent the wrong comment to you--again. So sorry.
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 2:17:00 PM
Thanks. Your comment made me blush. I am always looking to teach others or have others teach me. Criticism and comparison are vital to creativity.
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 2:16:00 PM
Thank you so much!
Date: 7/30/2015 12:14:00 AM
Beautiful sweet poem congrats ! ~lee
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 2:21:00 PM
thanks
Date: 7/29/2015 11:34:00 PM
Wow that's a perfect beauty Mary! Congrats on top place win!
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 2:22:00 PM
Thank you, Dr. Sharma!
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 11:24:00 AM
Thank you
Date: 7/29/2015 11:30:00 PM
ahhhhh simply A MAZ ING. Curtains closed on my contest and yours was the closet to perfection!
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Mary Rotman
Date: 7/30/2015 2:23:00 PM
Thank you so much, Andrea.

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