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Ice King

He grew within a frigid place No one thought those legs would ever part A Dark Prince thawed her frozen heart A member long and stiff like ice Penetrates Cuts through the cold His seed His power They both take hold Invade Satiate Invigorate Skin white as snow begins to glow A subtle blush She feels the rush Heated up Ever so slightly His cold blue eyes shine brightly She screams in the night Pleasurable blue light Her senses take flight Then the dark prince goes away The night was night and this is day There's no desire in him to stay With a heavy heart on the bed she lay For him just a thing of play Inside His seed Her baby grows What is happening she does not know Pulse is rapid it will not slow Her red veins turn to blue There is nothing she can do Her heart now frozen a block of ice She thinks cold thoughts that are not nice Inside the child feeds on her The days and nights become a blur In the middle of winter The Ice King is born From fragile womb his body torn Arrival accompanied by a storm Those present become statued ice The King extracts his sacrifice His mother spared To her his love he shows She wraps him in blanket of pure white snow His skin translucent begins to glow All of a sudden the Dark Prince appears He commands bring the baby over here I wish to gaze upon my son He is a truly magnificent one He looks closely at the baby's face Resemblance more than just a trace Blue eyes dark they extract a toll Sucking up the Prince's soul The Ice King emerges fully grown Regally rises to take his throne Mother cries Blue magical tears Time for coronation Rapidly nears Diamonds fall onto the ground Placed in ice The King is crowned Linda's Free Verse Contest Thanks to Leonora Galinta for letting me weave a story with her Ice King. Yanny's Dark Prince has also played a roll. Also thanks to SKAT for posting the Ice King Contest, if she increases the number of lines I will enter. I wrote this one before I knew there was a contest.

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Date: 7/26/2013 5:05:00 PM
Wow Rick! I love how you make the story, loved how you painted the words and made them into a pretty rhyme, and I saw the dark prince too :D I see another clear version story about the dark prince, Loved it! Definitely move to my fave :D thank you for bringing back a wonderful muse into my morning :D wishing you a great day there :D hug, Yanny
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/26/2013 11:41:00 PM
I am so pleased you enjoyed it. Who knows where the dark prince will end up next.
Date: 7/26/2013 12:14:00 AM
Yes, I can tell it's different somehow. Where did you make the most changes?
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/26/2013 6:22:00 AM
I fleshed out some of the stanza's that I felt didn't flow. It was a good skeleton to start with but I didn't feel I had fully develop my thoughts.
Date: 7/25/2013 9:43:00 PM
The second time round is the charm; I like it even more then the first. The ending seems to have changed a little bit and some to the content in the middle has changed. Phenomenal poem.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 10:08:00 PM
Thanks Casey, sometimes when you do a rewrite it can lose something. I'm glad that wasn't the case here.
Date: 7/25/2013 4:15:00 PM
I love it Richard,,, grand story. going to fav's ;}
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 10:09:00 PM
Thanks Debbie! I am honored.
Date: 7/25/2013 1:36:00 PM
I like it better Richard....a little softer....a little more hard romance going on here..haha...nice...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 10:10:00 PM
You kill me! Hard Romance LOL!
Date: 7/25/2013 12:00:00 PM
Richard this is incredible without doubt one of finest i have read this year Kudos Shadow x smiles
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 12:23:00 PM
Thanks Shadow you are most kind.
Date: 7/25/2013 10:53:00 AM
Don't know how you do it. I would love to sit and listen to your stories you have to tell. I am going to the er cause I cant get my temp under 103 and my ear is really bad. They better do something or its on. Colleen
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 12:24:00 PM
Sorry to hear you are not doing better. Hugs Rick
Date: 7/25/2013 9:59:00 AM
Wow!! Fantastic re write,,,the end I love the most i'm not sure if the original ended that way,,,but I see the difference. Great job....rick:)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 12:25:00 PM
No the end changed a fair bit. Glad you like it.
Date: 7/25/2013 9:22:00 AM
Like the old saying goes, "the second time around is better than the first!" Very creative, filled with outstanding imagery. Amazing fantasy! Sheer genius!...Milt
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 9:25:00 AM
Sounds like your describing my love life*lol* thanks for re reading.
Date: 7/25/2013 8:33:00 AM
Richard.....It has a better flow now! I like the changes you made! :) It is truly an epic tale....deep! Please check the line after his mother spared...Is there a mistake there? I know the darkness is only in your writes, Richard. :) I am not worried...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 8:55:00 AM
You are right I missed a word. Thanks.
Date: 7/24/2013 9:18:00 PM
You are so creative Rick!!!! Your also a natural story teller, this poem really draws you in, great image. Really enjoyed reading & its story line is, enchanting:) thanks......big hugz,,, cheriex
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 7:24:00 AM
Thanks Cherie
Date: 7/24/2013 9:24:00 AM
This is really great my dear friend Richard! You really penned a perfect & real epic. Excellent beginning up to the end. For me, this is really difficult like free verses. But you did it very well with lofty imagination and creativity! Hugging you so big big here & thank you so much for using my short poem as one of your inspirations. It's a great honor. Again, so much thanks! How I wish you can enter this in our dear friend Skat's contest. Wish you all the best! love lots, Leonora
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/24/2013 10:38:00 AM
Thanks Leonora, this enthusastic response makes my day. Take care Hugs Rick
Date: 7/24/2013 8:05:00 AM
An incredible fantasy! By the way, in regards to the 'Girl Rising' contest, I wrote a little something last night. It's not as crisp as I'd like it to be, however, should I keep the same title or create a title of my own?...Milt
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/24/2013 8:35:00 AM
Your own title is fine Milt.
Date: 7/24/2013 7:26:00 AM
WOW......new video game!!!!!! Or something!!!!!! Awesome Richard......have a great day.....its crazy here in OK..bad storms again last night...im between OK City and Tulsa...we had record 76-80 mile winds last night...I have down trees to cut up today.....fun.....
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/24/2013 7:43:00 AM
So sorry to hear that. Stay safe.
Date: 7/23/2013 11:45:00 PM
gosh, now this really is EPIC. I couldn't figure out what Skat meant by epic but I think this would fit the bill. Yes, I didn't get why she said epic but also haiku/senryu , so I have a haiku set ready to post but nothing epic like this one!!! Very imaginative this is.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/24/2013 6:09:00 AM
Unfortunately I can't enter in the contest because there are to many lines. I did however enjoy writing it.
Date: 7/23/2013 10:01:00 PM
Quite a tale, Richard....you are going in a different route than I'm used to lately with some of your work....I read this one through twice. Wish I could catch everything.....Interesting imagery...Have a good evening and night
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/24/2013 9:26:00 PM
Creativity is always a good thing, Richard. Exploring and trying out new things and stretching your wings. Maybe it's just me. I feel a little lost in the words. Your earlier work just brought things home so powerfully...There is also a bit of the darker side in your writes now...I'm not used to that. I'm not sure how to answer you.... :) Did I make any sense?
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/24/2013 6:10:00 AM
I'm not sure how to respond, is that a good or bad thing??
Date: 7/23/2013 8:44:00 PM
Fantastic story and so eloquently told that you make poetry look effortless Richard. I’m going to spend half the night reading your poems.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/23/2013 9:30:00 PM
Thanks Casey, I will check out some of yours as well
Date: 7/23/2013 7:07:00 PM
Finally 1st again. Very well done of course. I am going to urgent care in a bit. My ear is hurting so bad. It ruptured and has a hole in it. Cant get in to the ear Dr until next week. Love Colleen
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/23/2013 7:12:00 PM
So sorry you are going through this. I am glad you are going for help. Hugs Rick.

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