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The moon vanished into a pale of russet where humid air twirled along with clouds, and stars burst… flickering above hilltops to cast my lament across the sky: How wanton gulls crisscrossed on a flight; their shrills rattling that my heart echoed an image of first passion’s gaieties outlined by his maze of treachery, of ruse forgetting not my lesions from one August night, when tears split forth in torment without measure: Naive at eighteen, I drank yesteryear’s pain hoping fate could heal me from such drilling spin... then to wake up fed with grace upon new morn's behest. ~ John Hamilton's Your Best Poem 2020 Originally Written 5/13/2020 Resubmitted 5/22/2020

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Date: 5/23/2020 6:55:00 PM
"Naive at eighteen"....so true Nette! Yet we remember everything because that is a part of who we are now. Beautifully penned and brings back memories. Congratulations on your win :)
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Date: 5/23/2020 1:09:00 PM
Another congrats on an excellent poem, thanks Nette for this dazzling entry, so many great writes this time, worthy of a shared 2nd place!
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Date: 5/19/2020 4:06:00 PM
Congrats on another worthy winner Nette, stunning phrasing and word selection makes this a beauty!
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Date: 5/17/2020 4:15:00 PM
Congrats on your top win! Some great lines there but I like “ cast my lament across the sky”! Very good! Krish
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Date: 5/17/2020 1:19:00 PM
This is outstanding Nette! Congratulations on your first place win! xxoo
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Date: 5/17/2020 12:37:00 PM
Ohh what a lovely gem! Superb imagery! Ang galing, sobrang galing!
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Date: 5/17/2020 7:45:00 AM
We are all a bit naive when we are young.. You have a brilliant way with words and really know how to create vivid imagery in your poetry.. So great to have you back.. Congratulations on your first place in the contest..
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Date: 5/14/2020 12:30:00 PM
There is such a delicate gorgeousness; your heartfelt imagery fairly prances out of this one Nette.
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Date: 5/14/2020 1:44:00 AM
Serene brilliant words and phrases combined to produce a picture perfect poem - so glad to have you and your amazing poetry back. Hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 5/13/2020 2:07:00 PM
We are born naive, but told not to look at the light until we die! Aloha! Rico
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Date: 5/13/2020 6:03:00 AM
Beautiful poetry in ornamental words--as always, Nette. Skillfully crafted for a win.
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Date: 5/13/2020 3:07:00 AM
Every line is masterfully crafted; very poetic indeed, Nette, great write.
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Date: 5/13/2020 12:04:00 AM
"Naive at eighteen, I drank yesteryear’s pain"...brings back memories of the years when one couldn't think of ways to end the pain and then after so many years, only memories remain, how they made one feel vanishes with age. Beautiful :)
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Date: 5/12/2020 8:43:00 PM
This is so beautiful and intriguing. I love it from beginning to end, word after word. Love to you and best wishes in the contest which I haven't a doubt you'll place highly in. Blessings ~ Gina
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