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NEVER tell a secret to someone who says “I won’t breathe another word” I told you my deepest darkest secrets You said you wouldn’t breathe another word But I know for a fact that you’re still living And that you told a little bird That bird then started tweeting My ‘secret’ is all over the Internet If I get my hands on you you’ll regret it But I haven’t caught up with you YET! If someone tells you you can trust them Then you should be very very wary! Inspired but not for Idiom contest 23rd July 2016

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Lynn Marie

Date: 8/6/2016 4:15:00 PM

Very timely insight regarding social media. Written in a light yet wise manner highlighting the point of how very much words do matter, regardless of the platform. Miss the days of when "one's word was their bond". My age may be showing but I still value loyalty. A terrific, relevant write! blessings, lynn

Jai Bankson

Date: 7/27/2016 1:15:00 AM

Your title tricked me.lol.Real or not this a great write.You already know this but you have to share ''some''of those secrets to find out who is a /real/true/friend or more.The price we pay for breathe..?Justin

Jan Allison
Date: 7/29/2016 3:51:00 AM

Thanks Jai - I love to play with the titles it's important to draw the reader in - I will sometimes write with a twist which is totally not what the title implies:-) :-) hugs Jan xx

David Smith

Date: 7/24/2016 5:00:00 AM

Lots of levels and side streets with this one. Often think best kept secrets are ones everyone knows. My problem is everyone wants to tell me their secrets. Feel like a secret dumping ground sometimes. I have a few secrets in trust at present. I have a pretty good poker face. Some people like writing I've got a secret on their face. Have advantage of age of course. My degree of secrecy depends on knowledge re consequences. Have a good week. David

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2016 8:02:00 AM

If I'm asked to keep a secret then I maintain that trust David sadly not everyone is the same... thankfully for me this is a fiction write as I don't do social media :-( hugs jan xx

Rosa R. Badke

Date: 7/23/2016 7:51:00 PM

Wow, this poem really saddens me. It seems like this whole big world has big time trust issues. This is the number one reason why I have very few friends and don't even like going on the internet much. I work too long of hours to keep up with all this computer technology and really keep to myself. The less people say the better. Secrets should never be whether it is false or true to heart.... Rosa

Joshua Ward
Date: 7/24/2016 2:39:00 AM

this is good.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2016 8:29:00 PM

You are very wise Rosa - i don't do social media at all and find it sad people live their lives through it, sadly with 'internet friends' you never know who really it is you are talking to unless you meet them for real:-( hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/23/2016 4:26:00 PM

how about, " what you say stays with me and me alone?"... lovely write from the heart, jan.. i only have an hour here , this for a few weeks now... mail soon, promise.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2016 5:21:00 PM

Thanks Nette :-) I won't bother with the contest I can't get my must to come up with anything totally original and as its a premier contest I don't want yet another N/A lol:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless

Date: 7/23/2016 4:04:00 PM

the only way to keep a secret is to keep it a secret.....forget about them....find the little bird and tape his beak shut...

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2016 4:06:00 PM

Have got a big roll of sellotape John .... the less we share with people we don't really know the better:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Travis

Date: 7/23/2016 3:55:00 PM

Well done! Trust is always a great topic. Thanks for the kind comment on my haiku.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2016 4:05:00 PM

Thanks Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Angie Thomas

Date: 7/23/2016 3:15:00 PM

Great job with the poem Jan... It's short but sweet. And so so important to know... Hugs, Angie

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2016 3:39:00 PM

Thanks Angie:-) so glad to see you back again:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 7/23/2016 3:04:00 PM

nicely done, jan! i'm sure this happens all the time and you've described it quite masterfully...

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2016 3:06:00 PM

Thanks Ilene. I'm so glad I don't so social media - nothing is sacred any more:-( hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 7/23/2016 12:27:00 PM

I have a friend who puts everything on the internet. I rarely will unless it is something that helps or praises someone.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2016 12:52:00 PM

I am trusting less and less Tim and social media and false friends and the ability for something to be posted for the world to see is quite distressing. Am glad I don't do 2facedbook. :-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 7/23/2016 12:24:00 PM

Hi Jan! Paying your breathless poem and you a little visit today. I promise to send an email soon to catch up on what's been happening in our worlds. Hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2016 12:50:00 PM

Oh Lin I've been so worried not hearing from you - look forward to getting your soup mail:-) hugs jan xx Its just so lovely to see you back posting today:-) xx

Carol Eastman

Date: 7/23/2016 11:16:00 AM

Love this poem... And featured on the same day with some of PoetrySoups greats! Congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2016 12:49:00 PM

:-):-) Thanks Carol:-) I love my featured poem Carol lol I so love writing humour:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/23/2016 10:10:00 AM

I have been fortunate to find people I can confide in. I'm glad this one is fiction.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2016 12:46:00 PM

Thanks Richard:-) Hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/23/2016 9:24:00 AM

Hi Jan, I agree, there is much truth in this piece. My motto is trust is something earned and not something you just give away.A Big seven:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2016 12:45:00 PM

I have had so many falsehoods told to me and have got to the stage I take much with a pinch of salt especially on here - i am wary of what I tell to other's now:-( hugs jan xx