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I Ignore Where To Go 'Ghazal'

I was staring at my left side, feeling the beats my heart floats upon the waves tide, I ignore where to go The beats are rhytmic,it is hard to keep up with the waves are about me to kill, I ignore where to go I tried to dive in this wave but I am beat I cried to live in this cave where I can hide, I ignore where to go The seats are reserved in despair whether the heat burns,or the sea is to spill its darkness on me, I ignore where to go I was staring at my right side, cannot feel my feets my part gloats over my hellish ride, I ignore where to go The neatest dark costume of life I used to wear the dearest spark is consumed to chill, I ignore where to go I prayed to survive but the wave to my strengh is unaware It sprayed its salty water,I had to bide ,I ignore where to go I hopped the wave, I wiped the salt and I felt neat I hoped to wave ,to survive I took the pill, I ignore where to go Hafssa is the only girl to save herself from this cussed wave I strongly beat the swirl that used to put me aside, I ignore where to go

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Date: 8/4/2016 10:17:00 PM
The rhyming of Ghazal is AA bA cA dA eA etc. with and without refrain. You selected "I ignore where to go" as refrain.It is missing on the first half of your 1st couplet. For the rhyme, you wrote , "side and tide" on the 1st couplet, you should continue with words like" ride, hide...." Poetry soup has a great example of this style of poetry. Please click on the word ghazal that you selected. It will help you more or you can email me...
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Date: 3/16/2016 4:54:00 PM
Hafssa, nice write, best of luck in the contest ~
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Date: 3/16/2016 6:08:00 PM
thank you a lot Broken Wings :)

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