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I Felt Love At First Sight

I FELT LOVE AT FIRST SIGHT Heartbeats slow~to~rush, slow~to~rush in blue blithesome air, faces spotlight the summer sun, their laughter notes: a choir of February flair. When eyes match the brilliance of diamonds and cheeks bud like roses unreserved, the dulcet of shoots and tingles intercourse: non-stop thrilling every nerves, skin gloss by flaming wonder wheels triggering senses to ripple and dare, thoughts even suffer a sudden stroke despite rosaries of whispered prayers. It is as if ten-thousand fireflies constellate mimicing the farthest stars, I am leaping beyond the winds and hopping on the rim of a tilted caramel jar. Has a swarm of fallen meteors, melted in rainbow dyes, envelope my heart? How did the sullen sorrows I have~ within sighs slowly tear apart? Melancholy disperse as circus melody hugs hearts beating in lowly breasts, chains of interludes harp no shame as pure intentions are expressed. My bosoms has been dressed by famine-tattered scars, I moaned complains, but in the name of love authored by God, new life with you, I gain! __________________________________________________________________ ~~for DANCING with DESCRIPTION CONTEST ~~ ~~Sponsor: Casarah Nance~~ Olive Eloisa Guillermo 2:26 pm, November 11, 2015

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Dan Cwiak

Date: 11/23/2015 11:44:00 PM

Nicely done composition of love and tender feelings, Olive. Beautifully written and the emotions come through it.

Paul Callus

Date: 11/12/2015 4:36:00 PM

Oh this is so beautiful, sensual and romantic, Olive_eloi! You raise pure love to a higher level, while making use of captivating imagery. Top marks for you! Hugs // paul

Edlynn Nau

Date: 11/11/2015 12:51:00 PM

CONGRATUATIONS Olive on this sentimental and picturesque read. Hours of work here! :-p

James Fraser

Date: 11/11/2015 12:06:00 PM

Many congratulations little one on this beautiful poem being recognised in the contest. It's a gem to read, and isn't love at first sight lovely ;) hugs // James // xxxx

Skat A

Date: 11/10/2015 11:36:00 AM

Olive, Congratulations on your awesome win. SKAT

Viv Wigley

Date: 11/9/2015 10:21:00 PM

Love this one, Olive, a real feelgood piece, bounces along nicely. Well done! Viv x

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/9/2015 6:41:00 PM

Congratulations! I enjoyed this one.

Sandra Haight

Date: 11/9/2015 5:46:00 PM

Beautifully written, Olive. Congrats on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/9/2015 7:19:00 AM

thanks you Sandra.. =`) hugs back!

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 11/9/2015 12:13:00 AM

What an immense beautiful write. It flows smoothly within this reader..........A.M.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/9/2015 7:00:00 AM

Thanks much Afolabi.. I enjoyed writing this poem..!

James Inman

Date: 11/7/2015 6:04:00 PM

Beautifully written, Olive. So many excellent lines. Very impressive!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/20/2015 8:46:00 PM

Thank you so much James.. =`) so appreciate your comment,=`)

Lei Strauss

Date: 11/6/2015 6:49:00 AM

I'm starting to roll on my floor Olive. I loved it

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/20/2015 8:38:00 PM

Thanks much Lei, it will be cute seeing you roll.. =`)

Sandra Haight

Date: 11/4/2015 8:20:00 PM

Very beautiful and so full of romantic imagery, Olive! All the best for the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/16/2015 7:08:00 AM

thanks much Sandra.. =`) so appreciate it.. =`)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/4/2015 4:00:00 PM

really bursting with delight, eloi... love makes poetry, like yours, shine with the stars!.. kilig!,,huggs

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/13/2015 1:48:00 AM

thanks much Nette... appreciate your kilig comments....=`)

Kevin Fairbrother

Date: 11/3/2015 11:18:00 PM

A great piece of writing as your words danced to the tune of love, great, cheers Kev

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/10/2015 2:15:00 AM

thank you so much for your wonderful comment.. =`)

Robert Lindley

Date: 11/3/2015 6:46:00 PM

Love at first sight is what I had with my wife Riza and four years later we married! Image laced feast my friend! A7

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/9/2015 2:28:00 AM

thanks much Robert.. =`) more than the imagery is the feeling RObert.. =`)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/3/2015 6:34:00 PM

This is SUPER descriptive, I think it's just what Casarah is looking for and I enjoyed the unique imagery of it!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/9/2015 2:24:00 AM

Andie, thanks much for your lovely comment on my poem...=`) I just tried this one..

Skat A

Date: 11/3/2015 3:10:00 PM

nice :) SKAT

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/9/2015 2:10:00 AM

thanks much Skat.. =`)

Edlynn Nau

Date: 11/3/2015 1:39:00 PM

I always enjoy metaphors that mix the falling in love with the patterns in nature. You did that well here. Epic poetry not done much so bravery to take it on! I KNOW this took hours of work. If you wrote with a pencil then there is no graphite left by now! Lovely to meet you Amiga Olive.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/7/2015 7:45:00 AM

Thanks much Ednalyn.. am so glad you like my poem... and yes i like that type of eriting too

Len Gasun

Date: 11/3/2015 11:31:00 AM

Hello my very dear Amiga Olive! I supposed to go to bed already and be back at you tomorrow as I've stated in my replies to your comments on my poem; but I can't stop myself coming by here to read one of your outstanding masterpieces. This sooo adorable! You did it very well -as always! Kudos my friend. So enjoyed! Good luck in the contest! Now, I can go to bed smiling. Tytyssm and God bless! love lots and big hugs, amiga Leonora

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/5/2015 12:42:00 AM

Hi Leonora, thank you for your generous comment.. I really just up to the challenge of Cassie.. =`) And somewhat I want to describe in the most creative way I know how I felt last month of February, 2014... =`)thanks God bless and hugs!!!!! weeee!

Kp Nunez

Date: 11/3/2015 9:22:00 AM

This is indeed a love epic, Olive! So beautiful! 7 and all the best in the contest. hugs!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/4/2015 7:04:00 PM

Thanks much Kim . =`) weeeee... =`) hugs

Constance La France

Date: 11/3/2015 8:42:00 AM

Olive, beautifully penned poem, a loving 7 and best of luck in the contest. ..

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/3/2015 11:56:00 PM

Constance thank you..=`) I just tried it..