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I Dream Because

Because I dream, I know how to escape Because of this, I never run away Because when all my dreams do not take shape I dream some more because that is my way Because I can, I stand out in the rain Because that's what one does when one is free Because I care, I take God's name in vain Because my heart can't take what my eyes see Because what once was right is now what's wrong Some dreams came true because dreamers believed Because when they escaped time moved along Because as each dream dies, one is conceived Because my dreams help me forget our flaws I'd still find pleasure dreaming, just because by Daniel Turner

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Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 5/20/2018 11:41:00 AM

My mother kept a "Dream Book" that she used to offer us interpretations of our dreams and it had specific numbers associated with each interpretation. At times they appeared to be accurate but most of all it was fun especially when a number(s), played in the local lottery drawing, was a winner! I enjoyed reading this wonderful, provocative piece as dreams can be so symbolic on many levels based on the dreamer's perceptions and orientation to life! Hugs and best regards. Pandita

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/19/2018 9:33:00 AM

Deep one, Danny. I used to dream a lot of flying. Not since I was young though. (that has some significance to me). The last part of your sonnet is interesting to me. I am not sure dreams make me forget my flaws. In my dreams at night, I do such weird stuff!!! (writing them down in a dream journal to one day understand what it all means)

Carole Duet

Date: 4/10/2018 9:51:00 PM

Yes, me too. Sometimes dreams even come true...love this poem. FAV'd...btw the use of "because" is perfect. It adds interest and rhythm and I think this poem would make a good song........Carole :D

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 4/4/2018 5:04:00 PM

Just wonderful, my friend, and the repeating word does nothing but enhance the flow, and that's not easy to do ... love the message and the rhythm, and the very thoughtful and intelligent intent. Blessings, Friend! :-)

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/31/2018 9:14:00 AM

Daniel, I love the message in your fine Sonnet with excellent rhyme and meter. I find the repeated word 'because' does not detract but, for me, adds more power to the delivery of your message since that word 'because' sets up, in my mind, anticipation for an answer, which you deliver. Great poem! And, have a wonderful Easter Sunday! Sandra

Daniel Turner
Date: 4/1/2018 12:11:00 PM

Thank you, Mrs Sandra. i appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. I also truly value your opinion and I thank you for your candor. Have a wonderful Easter!

Jean Murray

Date: 3/30/2018 4:29:00 PM

For me, how something is written is unimportant in comparison to how it makes me feel. With this I feel the message is what a wonderful playground our brains can be.

Jean Murray
Date: 3/31/2018 11:41:00 AM

Thank you Daniel. My middle child is leaving Dublin as we speak, to come to my arms. Hopefully my baby will make it home here from there on Easter Monday.

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/30/2018 4:42:00 PM

Ah, a woman after my own heart. That is my feeling also, Jean. I try to figure out what the writer is trying to say and tend not to focus on how they say it. Thank you so much for your honesty and your grace. Have a wonderful Easter Sunday

Constance La France

Date: 3/30/2018 1:43:00 PM

Hi Daniel, I love the theme of your poem and in general I like repeating words and phrases in poems but BECAUSE you asked, I would have used the word because in each sentence but not always as the beginning word, for example.. I dream because I know how to escape/I never run away because of this/Because when all my dreams do not take shape/I dream some more because that is my way/ etc etc, but then that is not a sonnet anymore, just my thoughts but still a lovely write and well done..

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/30/2018 4:40:00 PM

Thank you, Constance. i appreciate your honest opinion. I knew to some it might be a little monotonous. "Because" is such a ubiquitous word. I simply couldn't think of another word to take it's place. i will take note of your suggestions:)Have a wonderful Easter Sunday.

Supraja Kannan

Date: 3/30/2018 11:14:00 AM

Such a beautiful sonnet as always... Great theme and an intriguing sonnet... Thanks for sharing...I really enjoyed it...

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/30/2018 12:09:00 PM

Hello my young friend:) So nice to see you today. How is school going? I appreciate your kind remarks and am glad you liked my little experiment. Take care and have a wonderful Easter Sunday.

Jan Allison

Date: 3/30/2018 10:28:00 AM

what an interesting variation form you've come up with Daniel I especially like the way you ended the final couplet ... just because you can:-) hugs jan xx

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/30/2018 12:07:00 PM

Thank you, Jan. I appreciate your time and your wonderful comments. hoping you have a wonderful Easter Sunday:)

Gary Bateman

Date: 3/30/2018 9:45:00 AM

Hello Danny, A wondrous sonnet specialty as always!! Yes, I do really like your sonnet here just as you've composed it. It makes entire sense to me. Don't change a thing -- unless you want to, of course. (I enjoy writing sonnets too, and must do one again very soon. For me, it depends on the theme.) It's always a great treat to read you poetry my friend!! Superb Work!! Best Always, Gary

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/30/2018 12:06:00 PM

Thank you, Gary. Wonderful to see you again. I appreciate your opinion and you taking the time to read and comment. I am glad you did not find the repetition monotonous nor distracting. I hope Ingrid and you have a wonderful Easter Sunday

Heidi Sands

Date: 3/29/2018 7:49:00 PM

I understand this poem DT and I do not find the repetition of because, to deter from the message. I like it as it is ! Well done :) I hope to see more .

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/30/2018 8:51:00 AM

Thank you so much, Heidi. I appreciate the positive feedback. I value your time and your opinion. Hoping you are feeling better these days. Stay sweet:)

Silent One

Date: 3/29/2018 6:25:00 AM

I understood your message, and I saw you blog... Poetry is subjective, so you have the freedom to express it how you wish.. This is different for a sonnet, but it does work and it is always good to think out of the box.. Each line has a different meaning, so it seems fine to me..

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/29/2018 9:51:00 AM

Thank you, S1. I appreciate you taking the time to come back and leave your opinion. I was mainly concerned if the "because" was a distraction to readers or if it was ok. It turned out about half and half. I've always been a little odd. lol

Denis Brezik

Date: 3/29/2018 1:49:00 AM

Nice read brave words into thoughts nice work bold strokes

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/29/2018 9:48:00 AM

Thank you, Denis. I appreciate your time and your support.

Caycay Jennings

Date: 3/28/2018 9:03:00 PM

Just read your belong, and my honest critique is that the repetition of 'because' adds dramatic effect - I truly like it because I really do. Now, question - is alliteration just a letter sound or does it also cover a word? You may not know either and I should look it up, I'll do that. So, in summary, Mr. Turner (who is not just an old man writing poetry - darn you), I enjoyed the poem and found the repeated word added to and enhanced the feeling conveyed, I liked! Poetry hugs ... An Old She

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/28/2018 9:11:00 PM

Thank you CayCay. I appreciate your honesty. So far it's about 50/50. As far as your question, I think the answer can be both or either. and yes I am just an old man who writes poetry. Common as dirt. I am pleased that you liked my poem.

Agnes Krampe

Date: 3/28/2018 8:04:00 PM

I actually like the repetition of "because" and find it enhances structure and rhythm. Tools like this have been employed before, to great effect. I would, however, want to make it more consistent between stanzas: use "because" to start line 1-3, and have every 4th line start differently - right now that is a bit random.

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/28/2018 8:21:00 PM

Thank you, Mrs Agnes. I think you might be right. Overkill on the because. I personally did not find it distracting but like I said, I wrote it. I appreciate your time and opinion. Hoping you are well:)

Becca Teagan

Date: 3/28/2018 5:57:00 PM

Hi Daniel. I love the message in your poem, but for me, I don't care for the repetition of the word. But I do like that you started it with "Because..." and then ended with "...just because" That ties the ending back to the beginning, and that works. I like that you are trying new things and open to feedback, that is how we grow. Hugs

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/28/2018 6:48:00 PM

Hello Becca:) Thank you for your input. I am happy you figured out the message. I value your time and opinion. "Just shake it up and see what comes out" lol I like to have fun playing with no rules.

Frederic Parker

Date: 3/28/2018 5:55:00 PM

nothing wrong with thinking outside the box, shows you have no fear... nothing ventured nothing gained

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/28/2018 6:45:00 PM

Thank you, Frederic. I have always been a risk taker. "Every stumble is not a fall and every fall is not a failure" a famous quote.

Craig Cornish

Date: 3/28/2018 4:00:00 PM

I agree with July---I would not have used Because as the word "because" it can be more easily detected than a word like dream and also more creative---yet I always love your writing.....

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/28/2018 4:11:00 PM

Thank you, Craig. I do appreciate your honesty and respect your opinion. It was mainly an experiment. I may try again. it all depends on my muse. I'm sure you know how that goes. Take care my friend.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/28/2018 2:59:00 PM

- I understand very well what you mean, Daniel - Your dreams and thoughts ... no one can take away from you ... they are yours forever and ever :) - Lovely poem :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/28/2018 3:30:00 PM

Yes and they are an escape from the harsh realities of life. Thank you Anne Lise. You are a sweetheart:)

Rob Carmack

Date: 3/28/2018 1:38:00 PM

Daniel - as a reader, I have no problems with what you did here. I get the message and the repetition did not have a negative effect with me.

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/28/2018 1:55:00 PM

Thank you, Rob. I probably should have used WE and our instead of me and my but not everyone feels the way I do so I kept it in the first person. I appreciate your honesty and candor. I may have to try again:)

Line Gauthier

Date: 3/28/2018 12:57:00 PM

Hi Daniel, you were asking about feedback on your use of repetition. In this particular poem the repetition of the word "because" attracts so much of the attention that I find it deters from any imagery or emotional content in the rest of the poem - the message that seems to come through most is that you long for the reader to understand the cumulative reasons.

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/28/2018 1:51:00 PM

Yes in a sense you are right to a certain degree. Yes we must live in the real world even though it is so cruel, We have changed/evolved so fast, we seem to have left common sense behind. the majority no longer rules as minorities now control policy making. Perhaps I tried to cover too much ground in one short poem. Thank you for your honesty. I appreciate and respect your opinion.

Charlie Smith

Date: 3/28/2018 11:57:00 AM

Good change of pace in this one DT, fantasies fascinate and stimulate. What would the mind do without them?

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/28/2018 1:44:00 PM

Thank you, charlie. i appreciate your kindness. Hope you are doing well old friend.

Lisa Ricci

Date: 3/28/2018 10:33:00 AM

Good Morning Daniel. I noticed your blog first and read your message there about repetition. I am a believer in repetition for strength and emphasis when utilized in free verse. I am not an expert on every aspect of the beautiful sonnet format. I can say this however your entry before us is lovely. I enjoyed the theme of dreaming and I did enjoy how the repetition was utilized in the ending line and thought. Thank you for sharing with us. Well done

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/28/2018 10:40:00 AM

Thank you, Lisa. i really appreciate your input. I know sometimes repetition can make a poem a real yawner. It was pretty tough writing it this way and have it still make sense. Have a blessed day:)

John Hamilton

Date: 3/28/2018 9:55:00 AM

Nice escape from reality dreams are, nicely done Danny!! Unfortunately eventually we wake up and have to face reality again.

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/28/2018 10:13:00 AM

Yes John. we do have to live in the real world. Not only do dreams provide an escape from reality, I think dreams also provide hope. They can drive us to fly higher than we normally fly. Thank you for stopping by John. I appreciate your input.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 3/28/2018 6:45:00 AM

Lovely thoughts Daniel..such relief in believing and dreaming..words of wisdom in a meaningful poem!

Daniel Turner
Date: 3/28/2018 9:22:00 AM

Thank you, Vijay. Simply trying new things with old styles. I am glad you see it's meaning. Makes me feel like at least my time was not wasted.