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I Could See the Sun

I could see the sun I start grabbing at it Trying to move up closer to it So I can feel the rays on my face And restore air back to my lungs The faster I waved my arms The more it seems that I am not getting anywhere Running out of breath Can’t hold it much longer The salty water stings my eyes But I can still Still see the sun Praying that I can hold out Because the sun is getting bigger by each stroke I am starting to feel the heat At a steady pace I keep on moving up Closer and closer Bigger and bigger I see the sun Finally my face feels the cool breeze I fill my lungs with air I feel the sun Now where is the land

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 5/10/2015 10:52:00 AM
Naomi :) Congratulations on having your poem featured this Mothers Day. SKAT love
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Date: 5/8/2015 9:20:00 AM
great lines, wonderful expressions. What better way for this message to flow?
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Naomi Jones
Date: 5/8/2015 9:21:00 AM
thank you
Date: 5/8/2015 8:29:00 AM
- A lovely poem, Naomi :) - Welkommen to P- Soup - I wish you a wonderful weekend, with many smiles and sunshine - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Naomi Jones
Date: 5/8/2015 8:32:00 AM
Thank you so much. Have a wonderful weekend as well.
Date: 5/6/2015 10:10:00 AM
Naomi, Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will get much delight in reading and in time become familiar with your verse. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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Naomi Jones
Date: 5/8/2015 8:33:00 AM
Thanks for the warm Welcoming. Thank you for liking my poem as well.
Date: 5/5/2015 2:34:00 PM
Hi Naomi. A strong image, well rendered, with a surprise ending. Enjoyed your first poem. Thanks.
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Naomi Jones
Date: 5/5/2015 2:39:00 PM
Thank you Mr. Jordan
Date: 5/5/2015 2:32:00 PM
why worry about land, you got the sun on your side. I would love to feel the sun like this, Love the poem Naomi, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun with this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I will enjoy following you and your poetry when you are ready :) We are Lucky To Have you. Enjoy 2015, with New Poet Friends @-> LINDA <-@
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Naomi Jones
Date: 5/5/2015 2:41:00 PM
Ms. Linda Thank you for the welcoming. I LOVE poetry. I am sure I will have fun. Thank you again

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