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a kid in love in deep adoration- oh the worship the longing affection I breathed his name writing it in my notebook a thousand times david dave dave mrs david . . . love forever and ever and ever I kissed him with passion in my mind and dreams a girl of fourteen a geek with bottle glasses with her nose in a book I even wrote a love note a fatal letter that winged itself to nowhere after all he was a quarterback a noble god so regal on his throne charging down the football field like he was at war rockets and bombs bursting the crowd cheering their champion in class he looked with a stare at his blank notes on tests the guy grimaced and groaned most popular boy in school with golden hair the body of a man the brain of a child he was my everything I wanted to have his children I was smitten enchanted enthralled oh it was love sadly he did not know my name did not even look at me I was nothing in his world I hung my head like a dying flower he did not see the ugly duckling in love one time I congratulated him he looked at me like I was speaking in an alien tongue the truth hurt deeply my heart bled with a sea of tears scars are the road map to the soul I have learned the years rolled on but I never forgot david years withered like leaves of decay my heart drowning in memories I left the ugly duckling far behind and the quarterback and a flower grew life rumbled on since those high school days then one bright sunny day not long ago on a city street I was walking my hair blowing in the wind like a flowing river streaming down my shoulders my sundress pressed to my curves construction workers whistled and blew kisses clouds like ice cream castles floated in the sky and there he was - walking towards me my long ago love from a far off place I knew it was him the smile the easy going walk the confidence the godly air and I was taken back to the shy little girl I passed by saying nothing nothing nothing but he paused I wonder did he know I continued on smiling and laughing to myself the wheels of justice turn slowly because he has lost all his golden hair and was that a donut underneath his shirt - and the drums of time have ceased to play on this love of long ago ________________________ July 22, 2015 Free Verse For the contest, Love In A Far Off Place, sponsor, Frank Herrera First Place

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Date: 7/29/2015 10:10:00 AM
A warm applause to your #1 placement Broken Wings! I really enjoyed every word of it! ;-)
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Date: 7/27/2015 10:44:00 PM
Awesome pen BW! Powerful words n wonderful; expressions n here u r at top place dear! Big congrats!
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Date: 7/27/2015 9:56:00 PM
BW, Its great to see this awesome pen in the top spot. Congrats!:-)Alexis
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Date: 7/27/2015 9:52:00 PM
It's very gratifying when you're thankful that a 'never meant to be' turns out to be a blessing. And no more ugly duckling (though I can't imagine you ever were). A worthy win, BW, and much congratulations. Pop a cork! Viv x
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Date: 7/27/2015 9:41:00 PM
Those awful, awkward high school days...you captured them perfectly in this amazing write, and I love the touch of poetic justice! Congrats and hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 7/27/2015 8:44:00 PM
Dropping by to say ,congrats!!! :O)
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Date: 7/27/2015 8:09:00 PM
Dropping back my my congrats - an outstanding poem so deserving of the top spot:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/27/2015 5:30:00 PM
Wow, B W you led us on journey, with feelings enjoyed, suppressed, bottled, and then, wham, you made a neat twist at the end. Great job. Congrats
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Date: 7/27/2015 5:08:00 PM
Such an enchanting write, Constance! It captured and held my attention to the very last word! Congrats on your well-deserved 1st place win! Love, Kim
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Date: 7/27/2015 1:41:00 PM
Fantastic poem. Constance. Congratulations on your win. We gals have all had this moment and it's delicious.
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Date: 7/27/2015 12:21:00 PM
Broken,, Congratulations on the win. SKAT
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Date: 7/27/2015 11:44:00 AM
That is the future for you depressing sometimes.B.W., beautiful descriptive write a 7, congratulations on you win. Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/23/2015 2:51:00 PM
This is a masterpiece in my opinion. Every verse was inspiring and lead to the superb ending. Life comes full circle but the second glance we tend to see so very much more! A7 and a great, great poem!
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Date: 7/22/2015 11:43:00 PM
OMG, I agree with frank, this is absolutely BRILLIANT. SEVEN
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Date: 7/22/2015 6:18:00 PM
BW, l enjoyed this piece. Its a story of loving someone at distance. Going through your teenage years is awkward enough, being in love with someone who does not love you back can be devastating. Great ending to an outstanding poem. Good luck in the contest:-) Alexis
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Date: 7/22/2015 5:00:00 PM
Wow!!!!! This read like a winner to me, you penned it extremely great, good luck in the contest.............A.M.
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Date: 7/22/2015 3:46:00 PM
This experience would be such a good lesson to any girl or boy who lacks self-esteem in their poignant teen years. Time and nature can play a surprising game of bewilderment! Good luck, Constance!
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Date: 7/22/2015 3:15:00 PM
how the wonder of admiration from a distance... enchanting write, constance.. huggs
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Date: 7/22/2015 1:09:00 PM
Cute ending to this magical love story..Reads like a winner for the contest..Way to go..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 7/22/2015 12:33:00 PM
A tremendous write and a great story of love.. BW, this is magnificent!!! :O)) i'm breathless til the end of the lines... WOW!!! :O))
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Date: 7/22/2015 11:57:00 AM
I was hooked from start to finish - I am sure many of us can relate to this write of unrequited love - very good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 7/22/2015 11:34:00 AM
Great story I love the "winged it's self to nowhere" line. Good luck in the contest ~ lee
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