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I Ask You This

“If I have to cry to keep you, I will keep weeping.”- The Temptations If our atmosphere Becomes a shattered animosity If our cumulus clouds Become wrecking balls against our Sun If the touch of your hands, Turns into rabid, feline tongue If your messages of clarity & “I love you” Translate into a Mime’s distress signal If the sway of your rosemary breaths Disappear I ask you Would your love Your real love Really Truly Make me shed oceanic leaks While you ride leaky canoe Above our water garden Never tossing raft Never diving in To become my lighthouse savior Because love Real love Should never Ever Make you embrace torment’s cry Nor should love Ever reciprocate With muted stanzas Date stamped: “Return to Sender” ©Drake J. Eszes

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Jack Jordan

Date: 12/24/2013 9:07:00 AM

Blake, thank you for your kind and generous support this past year. May you have a fine Christmas and a fantastic 2014... Jack

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/27/2013 8:40:00 AM

My good man, Jack, you too! Thanks so much! =)

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 12/8/2013 7:29:00 PM

An exquisite piece, Drake. Well done!

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/9/2013 9:22:00 AM

Hi & thanks very much!

Aiyah Torres

Date: 12/4/2013 12:14:00 PM

drama and love, a perfect combination to express one's deep emotion... I was carried away with those lines,can't even stop my heart for beatting...I felt it!!! you amde me fall in love again...fantastic!!!..one love_AiyaH :")

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/4/2013 12:33:00 PM

A deeply awesome comment. Thank you so much, Aiyah! =)

Daisy Goodman

Date: 11/26/2013 11:08:00 AM

This is a beautiful poem! nothing can move me more than being still and reading. :)

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/26/2013 11:22:00 AM

Hi Daisy!!! Nice of you to drop in. :) Thank you so much for that charming comment.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/7/2013 4:26:00 PM

LOVE the message in this one. SO TRUE!!

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/8/2013 10:37:00 AM

Thank you very much for that, Andrea. =)

Shirley Candy

Date: 11/7/2013 3:16:00 PM

A perfect seven! Amazing poem with such a dramatic ending. Going to my fave. Thank you for sharing this, DD. xoxo

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/7/2013 3:44:00 PM

=D You have no idea how much I appreciate that, PS. You're truly awesome.

John Loving Iii

Date: 11/7/2013 12:39:00 PM

fantastic fantasy.

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/7/2013 12:42:00 PM

Indeed it is, John! =D Thank you so much!

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 11/4/2013 8:56:00 PM

Amazing verse. Your words are exceptional and mesmerizing. Hell no - I'd never return something so awesome :D hahah Always, Laura

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/7/2013 12:10:00 PM

A smart move, Laura. =D Thank you so much!

Donna Jones

Date: 11/3/2013 6:42:00 PM

Hey Drake...I'm patient I guess...there is that point caring tears turn to pain..then respect is lost...thanks for the wonderful poem sir

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/3/2013 6:47:00 PM

Some are patient, yes. I can understand what you're saying definitely. No argument there. Thank you so much, Donna. :)

John Posey

Date: 11/3/2013 3:11:00 PM

I really enjoyed this one, partly because I believe I chose the correct corridor of understanding. I spoke of some of the same emotions in my post, "True Love Never Knows Why." The silence of a love unreturned results in an almost unbearable pain. Growing doubt of someone's love for you is hard to bear. I believe we use ink from the same inkwell, but use different quills. Nice, writing. BTW thanks for your comment on "Eternal Hope." I left you a reply on it. -Jake always respecting your craft.

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/3/2013 4:42:00 PM

Cheers to you for this. Seriously. Epic comment. I have been on both ends of the spectrum. I see what youre saying loud and clear. Damn. Thanks so much, John.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 11/3/2013 8:58:00 AM

A stunning write! Love the ending. How sad when love loses its way in the echoing mazes of silence.

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/3/2013 9:05:00 AM

You are quite right, Monterey. Quite right. Thanks so much!

James Marshall Goff

Date: 11/3/2013 7:01:00 AM

Free flowing art! Nice! Jimbo

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/3/2013 8:12:00 AM

JIMBO! Many thanks sir!!!! =D

Carrie Richards

Date: 11/2/2013 3:12:00 PM

Clouds described as 'wrecking balls' against the sun........omg........how your mind conjures up such amazing and wonderful lines.......I am always in awe !! As always.....I loved this one!

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/3/2013 8:12:00 AM

You leave me in that same awe, Carrie. True story! You're are SUPER sweet. Thank you so much!

Cherie Thomas

Date: 11/2/2013 2:35:00 PM

Hi Drake wow those last 2 stanzas really sum, these fantastic words up. I miss your.poetry:) tyfs...Cherie:0)

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/3/2013 8:10:00 AM

Hey Cherie! It's been ages! :) How have you been doing? Thank you very much. Ending have to hit hard. I'm glad that did it for you.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/2/2013 9:04:00 AM

Stopped by to read the comments. You have some really good ones here.

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/2/2013 10:23:00 AM

Awesome. :)

Lisa Mccall

Date: 11/2/2013 9:00:00 AM

Wow breath taking. Loved this write. By far one of my favorite poems. you have such great talent.

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/2/2013 10:21:00 AM

Hey Lisa! Thank you very much. You're very kind to say that. :)

Sandra Adams

Date: 11/1/2013 9:16:00 PM

no real love should not make us embrace torments cry...though sometimes it does, made me think of the song by brandy, have you ever loved somebody so much it makes you cry...I think many of us can say we have...now you have me pondering so many thoughts as good poetry often does...excellent poem Drake... from a sincere and beautiful heart it flows :) hugs

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/2/2013 1:45:00 AM

Yes, having been on both sides of the fence, I can say it can make us cry. But, that's kind of when you know. That Brandy song is a good example, certainly. I'm glad this is making you think. Thanks so much, Sandra!

Kelly Deschler

Date: 11/1/2013 5:09:00 PM

I completely agree with you! True and honest love should never make us cry. The only tears that fall, should be tears of joy. An excellent poem, Drake, very emotional and heartfelt. I loved it!

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/1/2013 5:11:00 PM

Yes. Right there. Absolutely! It may not always happen that way. But, damn if I ain't going to try! :) Thanks so much, Kelly!

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 11/1/2013 5:03:00 PM

superbly penned beautifully

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/1/2013 5:08:00 PM

Thanks a lot, Liam!

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

Date: 11/1/2013 3:49:00 PM

Wow, yeah I read this and almost had thoughts of another popular song "Tears of a Clown" by Smokey and the Miracles LOL! Though, the romantic in me is still touched by the gesture...Great lines by you though! MC

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/1/2013 4:28:00 PM

YES! Good call! Great classic. Yes, I can understand why. Many thanks, Marquis!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/1/2013 7:54:00 AM

- Those who do not dare to open their hearts, will never experience true love ..... - Open mind, let the sun in .... - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/1/2013 8:52:00 AM

Amen to that. =) Thank you, Anne Lise!!!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/31/2013 12:11:00 PM

sometimes, the best way to love the self back is to end something that no longer works for us, no matter how hard this can be....heart-wrenching, drake yet fearless, definite, and empowering...darn superb write!..:) hugggs!

Poet Tacito
Date: 10/31/2013 12:19:00 PM

So. Very. True. Your perspective moves me. Thank you so much, Nette. =D

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/31/2013 9:38:00 AM

I enjoyed the dialogue this piece creates. I would say that all are worth the tears and if they are not we haven't gotten to know them well enough. Sometimes we have been hurt in ways that prevent us from seeing or being seen and in the end we miss out on the magic that exists at the core of each of us.

Poet Tacito
Date: 10/31/2013 9:41:00 AM

Quite right. You are a glass half-full heart. Humanity needs more folks like you for the long haul. Thank you kindly, Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/31/2013 9:39:00 AM

I have added to my favorites!

Jay Loveless

Date: 10/31/2013 7:12:00 AM

Breathe taking Drake. I have to love your writes, they are so beautiful, leaving me speechless. I cant choose a favorite line <3

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/1/2013 5:09:00 PM

LOL awesome! =D Otherwise, I'll order you an oxygen tank off Amazon or Ebay. ;-)

Jay Loveless
Date: 10/31/2013 4:41:00 PM

Haha Ill remember to be sure to catch it, a trick to do around your writing

Poet Tacito
Date: 10/31/2013 7:19:00 AM

Hey there, Jay! :) Just be sure to catch your breath, ok? I can't have any reader of mine fainting on me, flattering as it is. =D I'm glad you stopped by. Thank you very much!

Christy Ralph

Date: 10/31/2013 12:31:00 AM

I'm speechless after i read this. So beautifully written. Drake you're so talented! Its excellent! Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem with us!

Poet Tacito
Date: 10/31/2013 6:30:00 AM

Hi there, Christine! :) Very cool of you to stop by! I do appreciate that. Thank you so much!