Hot Soup

Emotions beg for hot soup. The weary traveler lost- Seeks a grounding warmth. The bored wade in head first, Dodging carrots, and diving for the eggplant, Wondering where the deep purple went? The sick seek the comfort of clear broth- It requires a downward thrust, the averted gaze- A private withdrawal.

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 2/15/2009 12:39:00 PM

Wow cool point of view, novel. The weary traveler lost- seeks a grounding warmth raw emotions beg for hot soup. The bored wade in head first, Dodging carrots, diving for eggplant, Wondering where the deep purple beet went? The sick seek the comfort of clear broth- requiring a downward thrust, an averted gaze- a private withdrawal. I reinforced the exsisting patterns furthered the excellent use of alliteration. Just a thought, what do you think? Light & Love Debbie