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Hot Love - For Contest

Susie’s cheeks glowed, her face burning with desire She began licking her ruby red lips with expectation So sure tonight was going to be THE night Susie had waited so so long for this moment … She was certain she wasn’t going to be disappointed When she saw me her pupils dilated She was feeling hot, so damned hot Beads of sweat began to form on her brow Her long dark hair stuck to her forehead She brushed it away with a flick of her hand Her pulse rate quickened She reached out and held me in her hand Her probing fingers examining every inch She opened her mouth Pearly white teeth gripped and she bit so hard YES! YES! YES! YES! Her fiancé screamed, He knew how much this moment meant to her …. After five years Susie had finally won the National Chili eating contest! Contest – How hot was it! – John Lawless 07~23~15

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James Fraser

Date: 8/28/2015 4:05:00 PM

Hot, hot, sought not, for it became quite chilli, silly~me for thinking it was, ok, just because, now I pause, congrats now I'm in applause~~Hugs//James xx

Jan Allison
Date: 8/28/2015 4:24:00 PM

I had to have a little twist here James lol:-) hugs jan xx

Eric Boddie

Date: 8/8/2015 9:07:00 AM

that entertains so very well....chili eating, a marvelous tale....and with you skill, I think I just fell....in Love with this gem, you really hammered that nail....;)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/8/2015 9:39:00 AM

Thanks so much Eric:-)hugs jan xx

Eric Boddie
Date: 8/8/2015 9:24:00 AM

and for all it is worth a much deserved congrats to you....;)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/7/2015 9:13:00 PM

Jan, thought I had congratulated this one, but guess I didn't . BIG congrats, my friend!! (I should have gone funny!!)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/8/2015 2:55:00 AM

Thanks Andrea:-) I thought the ending may be too hot lol hugs jan xx

Lycia Harding

Date: 8/7/2015 7:24:00 PM

Ha! You funny, Jannie, congrats on your win! xoxo

Jan Allison
Date: 8/8/2015 2:54:00 AM

Thanks Lycia:-) hugs Jan x

Eve Roper

Date: 8/6/2015 10:39:00 AM

Wonderful and funny write, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 8/6/2015 11:15:00 AM

Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/6/2015 5:51:00 AM

Jan, l just stopped by to say congratulations on your hot win:-)Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 8/6/2015 5:58:00 AM

Thanks for your support Alexis:-) hugs jan xx

Skat A

Date: 8/6/2015 1:04:00 AM

Jan, Congrats on your Hot, hot win. Love SKAT

Jan Allison
Date: 8/6/2015 3:13:00 AM

Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/5/2015 11:41:00 PM

And back again with big congrats Jan and another read on this witty write of yours!!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/6/2015 12:03:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by Dr Sharma I do appreciate your support:-) hugs Janxx

John Lawless

Date: 8/5/2015 10:15:00 PM

Way to go Jan....Chili will get you everything but a second date....A sensual seduction leading to a climactic twist. Thanks for playing in the heat.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/6/2015 12:02:00 AM

Thanks John glad you enjoyed my take on the 'hot' theme:-) hugs Janxxx

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 7/26/2015 3:36:00 AM

hahaha that chili must have been reallY hot. this one is a winner

Jan Allison
Date: 7/26/2015 5:59:00 AM

The Carolina Reaper - Its the hottest chili in the world Njeri:-) hugs Jan xx

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 7/25/2015 6:28:00 PM

lmao Jan fantastic hugs 7

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2015 6:30:00 PM

I did change the poem slightly Shadow I thought it could be seen as being too hot lol:-) hugs jan xx have since seen another poem on a similar theme:-) hugs jan xx

Harry Horsman

Date: 7/24/2015 11:05:00 AM

one would have to be in love to eat one of those,,,,saw the title thought of Marc Bolan,,,now can see him singing this...

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2015 12:55:00 PM

Darren Waston and I did a parody of that song under the name Jadazzle United lol - T rex were awesome:-( hugs jan xx

Darlene Gifford

Date: 7/24/2015 6:23:00 AM

Very funny, Jan! A 7. And your ending surprises. Will be a big hit with the sponsor I'm sure. And congrats on your other contest wins. Best of luck, your Friend, ~~Darlene

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2015 7:23:00 AM

I hope it is not too hot for John lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Wilma Neels

Date: 7/24/2015 5:36:00 AM

hehehe, I just love this Jan :) Good luck for the contest with this witty write :) xx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2015 7:22:00 AM

Thanks Wilma hope it wasn't too hot lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 7/24/2015 5:05:00 AM

You are a teaser and a cheater! You cheated me from my anticipation, dear Jan. From now on I will abhor Chilli! Ha-ha. Great writing, good luck on your contest and a seven to go with!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2015 7:22:00 AM

LOL Demetrios - I did amend the original poem I thought it was a little too hot lol:-) hugs jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/24/2015 4:23:00 AM

How sweet Jan ,, ur sizzling words end up in a fine humour,, pure wit that I love,, gl in contest!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2015 4:26:00 AM

I hope John doesn't think it is too hot lol:-) hugs jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 7/23/2015 10:22:00 PM

Jan sweet JAn, hahahhaa!!! Love this! you made me giggle!!! imagery plus the increasing hotness well well! :P!~Olive Eloisa

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2015 2:24:00 AM

Glad I made you laugh Olive ... I was worried someone might find the imagery a bit too hot to handle lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet

Date: 7/23/2015 7:37:00 PM

You have a taste for the humorous and an enviable imagination. Well done. Emile.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2015 2:23:00 AM

Thanks Emile - I hope this is hot enough for John lol :-) hugs Jan x

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/23/2015 7:12:00 PM

WOW, that was hot, I was sweating with every word!!...:-)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2015 7:14:00 PM

lol I hope its not too hot for the contest lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/23/2015 5:19:00 PM

Jan, because I know your personality, I was expecting the twist!! It must have been a chili DOG. hahaha. WAy to make the contest interesting!!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2015 5:25:00 PM

lol I did have the ending slightly different but rewrote it before posting it lol:-) They really do hold chilli eating contests - not my scene at all but I guess some people will do anything to get in the Guiness Book of records lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 7/23/2015 4:40:00 PM

lol....I was wondering what the twist was going to be...now that's hot

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2015 4:43:00 PM

LOL Tim you know I am twisted sometimes when I write - just hope it is hot enough for John lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/23/2015 4:24:00 PM

a real sizzler, jan... i like how you spiced this up!.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2015 4:30:00 PM

I hope it's hot enough for the contest - at least its not about the weather lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 7/23/2015 4:20:00 PM

LOVE the twist at the end, Jan!! Great poem :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2015 4:29:00 PM

I was a bit unsure of the original ending I had written Laura so it has been amended slightly - they do take these contests so seriously - I can't see the point myself but I guess some people simply can't resist the challenge - the Carolina Reaper is the World’s Hottest chilli pepper. :-) hugs Jan xx