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wobbling earth Phoebus slipover & winkling horizon mind thrums cliffhanging rhyming & static reach cooling brisk air autumn ribbons nettled disgruntled & kibitzed stillborn moon thought molds around cornucopia curvatures &spine silken rustles & wind sweeping spawning slices of arctic time swaggering sight&smell memories no privilege of quietus born crane &wings nuzzled in uncured coves and shade of huddled house deep-dug to shingle no clouds swell & no taste moisten dust-dry rhizomes sun stretches& tired meadow with swung gold & brown stalk twilights sharp & seed shrunk dwindled green promise equanimous spinous pernicious posthumous laden with agony except poets ensnared in necropolis dusk dumps cosmos cupping crystal& protean oaths dawdling delving digging drizzling attic wound pauperized cloister willowy gleam orphaned wadded writhe within shell between consciousness & humanity nexus started from h e a r t c u s p 3rd Place contest winner Written: September 22, 2022 A Brian Strand Premiere Choice Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Brian Strand NOTE:THIS IS AN OPEN(organic) FORM VERSE using spaces&breaks without grammatical symbols ,the ' open' relies upon 'the one breath limitation' & so inherently requires the 'reader' (reciter) to input and responds thus making this enigmatic form a two way interplay & interpretatIon unique to the moment& changing according to mood is inherently variable.

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Date: 10/6/2022 10:16:00 AM
You continue to amaze me with your creativity and use of language Lasaad. Not only does this poem have a rhythm like waves but the "open" format illustrates the poem. Congrats and high fives for your win! Blessings and prayers.
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Date: 9/26/2022 12:50:00 PM
- Congratulations on your great win, Las :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/25/2022 9:25:00 PM
Congratulations Lasaad on your outstanding win on this well deserved piece of zig zagging poem.. :)
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Date: 9/25/2022 8:37:00 PM
"cloister willowy gleam orphaned", "cosmos cupping crystal& protean oaths" - Beautiful. Congratulations!
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Date: 9/24/2022 10:29:00 AM
An intriguing write Sotto, Very nicely penned
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Date: 9/23/2022 1:46:00 PM
A very creative form to display intriguing imagery and a sprinkling of illiteration to inhance the rhythm, Lasaad. Great entry for the contest. An interesting read for me. Thanks for sharing, Bill
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Date: 9/23/2022 12:31:00 PM
Love this one Lasaad Brian Strand dows many like these. Yours is one of my favorites. Congratulations my friend you do this form perfectly.
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Date: 9/23/2022 5:45:00 AM
Excellent yet I had to work hard to understand. A very original poem.
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Date: 9/23/2022 4:20:00 AM
Your creative spirits shine my friend. Best to you, Lasaad.
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Date: 9/22/2022 11:40:00 PM
Wow, love the openness, Lasaad. The poetry is excellent. The whole universe brought to us via your pen and mind.
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Date: 9/22/2022 9:33:00 PM
Amazing lay out.....dear friend ! Very artistic ! Got carried away by its shape, shall read the poem later :)
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Date: 9/22/2022 6:23:00 PM
Love the layout form with meaning. Many blessings friend
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