Homeless:

I have walked away from all I've known, I have no place that I can call my home, The earth was my bed last night hard and dry, I know not the answers I question why. People don't approach me when on the road, The expression on my face bears true load, Suffering loneliness the path I'm on, But deep in my heart there still plays a song. It's just like the ocean under the moon, There cannot be joy in my life too soon, Answer to no one, no one is my boss, I have no comfort though that is my loss. You may pass me by soon some sunny day, If you do just leave me be on my way. (Ten syllables per line)

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Annette Gagliardi

Date: 6/15/2017 11:10:00 PM

Congrats on your placing in this contest. Nice work.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 6/15/2017 10:36:00 AM

Congrats on your placement with this poem that describes the plight of SO many! Janice

Winged Warrior

Date: 6/15/2017 8:56:00 AM

Stupendously! done...Wolfie...only the poets care...all the best my friend...^WW^

Annette Gagliardi

Date: 5/28/2017 10:14:00 PM

this is an interesting write. You might recount your syllables (ten per line) and read it out loud to help you hear the sound of your poem. I like your content, but think you could tighten it up by rearranging the words on a couple lines. all in all, a great write.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 12/12/2016 4:33:00 AM

Excellent poetry, Budge. Meaningful and gripping truth. I lived that life for a time as well, I can truly related to the loneliness and the travails. Beautiful sadness this poem is. Such wisdom and honesty in this write. Loved this poem very much so. Love and peace to you, my dear friend.

Robert Lindley

Date: 12/9/2016 10:01:00 AM

Your sonnets are deep and present pure gold my friend. Gifting a clear and truthful message we all should read and pay great heed to. The plight of many of the homeless is not their fault. Many are innocent women and children facing true hardships!

Doug Vinson
Date: 12/9/2016 12:33:00 PM

At the risk of emphasizing an off-topic tangent here, I heartily agree, Robert. My wife is a high school teacher in a severely-disadvantaged area, and among 150 or so students every year, there will be 50 to 100 cases of true hardship, some off-and-on being homeless, having been betrayed, having been abandoned, living on the margins. The stories of many of the kids are truly harrowing.

Doug Vinson
Date: 12/9/2016 12:32:00 PM

There are a few that stand above all - "mom finally found a job, got us a place to live. She now works two 8-hours-per-day jobs, with travel between, and finds time to shop, cook meals, wash clothes, love us, and be interested in our work and progress at school." An admirable and monumental affirmation of motherly love.

White Wolf
Date: 12/9/2016 10:10:00 AM

Once I allowed a woman and her child stay with me for free and she stole from me and was truly hopeless! But I do understand where you are coming from Robert. We can't tarnish them all with the same brush! It's the children that suffer the most and are brought up so badly! Running out of characters!

Paloma P

Date: 12/9/2016 9:52:00 AM

Your sonnet is moving Rick, my heart gently weeps.

Darren White
Date: 12/19/2016 3:09:00 AM

haha, that was exactly my first thought too. How horrible really 0.o

White Wolf
Date: 12/9/2016 9:56:00 AM

As long as it's not your guitar! there is nothing worse than a weeping guitar! haha /|\

Cheryl Hoffman

Date: 12/9/2016 8:37:00 AM

Love this well done poem depicting the unfortunate plight of the homeless Rick! Well said!:)

White Wolf
Date: 12/9/2016 8:41:00 AM

Thank you very much, Cheryl /|\

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 12/9/2016 7:36:00 AM

Excellent, Rick! The protagonist knows he has caused his own misery and has judged himself unworthy. 7+

White Wolf
Date: 12/9/2016 7:41:00 AM

Exactly! Thank you, Kim /|\

Chris Green

Date: 12/9/2016 7:01:00 AM

Wow, you seem to be leaning on a reoccurring theme tonight. But, I did read your reply below to Wendy and now it makes sense. What a kind gesture to help one in need who inspired this wonderful poem. If only more would take this attitude. Nicely done Rick.

White Wolf
Date: 12/9/2016 7:06:00 AM

Thanks, Chris, have a great day mate! /|\

Wendy Rycroft

Date: 12/9/2016 2:37:00 AM

I'll put some money in your hand, and pray for you or invite you home for dinner, I couldn't walk past without trying to help x good words x

White Wolf
Date: 12/9/2016 2:41:00 AM

Yeah, I'm the same, I passed an old man the other day and turned around and went back and gave him $10. It was all I had at the time. So now I keep an eye out for him! He inspired this poem. /|\

Just James

Date: 12/9/2016 2:20:00 AM

I love your work! This version of English sonnet my fav. for sure!

White Wolf
Date: 12/9/2016 2:24:00 AM

What a great compliment! Thank you, JJ /|\

Doug Vinson

Date: 12/9/2016 1:52:00 AM

I hope he finds something. May the wind stay away.

Doug Vinson
Date: 12/9/2016 8:57:00 AM

Rick, while you were composing your reply to Darren, I commented. It's a problem with PoetrySoup - your reply appears under the later comment. It would be a good present for all of us to have the code genies fix it.

White Wolf
Date: 12/9/2016 1:58:00 AM

Sorry, Doug! Donny know what happened there! /|\

White Wolf
Date: 12/9/2016 1:57:00 AM

I'm just learning myself, but I do use the syllable counter for all my sonnets! Robert Lindley is great at sonnets, check out some of his works, and Andrea. She has taught me heaps too! And I know not why I prefer know not? Haha just do in this! I've only been doing sonnets for about two months now, so mine are still quite rough around the edges! Am always open to criticism, however!

Darren White

Date: 12/9/2016 1:45:00 AM

Apart from the fact that I love the sonnet, I do... I have two questions and I hope you don't mind. 1) Do you prefer syllable counting over meter? 2) Do you prefer 'know not' over 'don't know' in the last line of the first stanza? I am just curious, and always eager to learn :)

Doug Vinson
Date: 12/9/2016 9:01:00 AM

Cool, Darren - did not know you can fix it in 'My Outbox > Poetry Replies Outbox' - Thank you!

Darren White
Date: 12/9/2016 3:04:00 AM

Okay! Thanks for the honest replies :) Oh, and Soup moves your reply up when two people post something the same time, like you and Doug did. you can correct/delete it via the My Outbox > Poetry Replies Outbox

White Wolf
Date: 12/9/2016 2:59:00 AM

Andrea Dietrich! Or the Silent One! They are experts on sonnets.

White Wolf
Date: 12/9/2016 2:00:00 AM