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His Eyes

I remember the curve in the small of his back where I fit just right and where my knees were cupped by his. They say he’s aged now, tired, sad, silver in his hair but, so have I, and know this it was never the chiseled features of Adonis I sought but that twinkle of eye, never the perfection of legend but a swagger of mischievous pride. I remember the way he looked at me like he’d died and gone to heaven the boom of his laughter, still rings in my mind beside the hollow in his shoulder where my cheek fit. They say he’s tired now worn down by time but I won’t see it…I have memories and the light I’m sure is still twinkling in his eyes.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 10/19/2012 12:53:00 PM
The write touched my heart....beautiful words Debbie. Congrats on your win!
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Date: 10/13/2012 9:38:00 AM
Congrats on your top win with this gem!!
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Date: 10/12/2012 3:47:00 AM
Congratulations Debbie! Fabulous win - sorry it's delayed...just getting a chance to read the poems now - Shaz :D
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Date: 10/9/2012 10:32:00 PM
MANY CONGRATS DEBBIE ON ANOTHER GREAT AND GLORIOUS FIRST PLACE WIN LUV ..
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Date: 10/9/2012 8:32:00 PM
Debbie, congratulations, with your awesome poem in Gail's contest..... xox~pd
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Date: 10/9/2012 6:10:00 PM
Wow!wonderful and beautiful write,Debbie...I love this..Congratulations on your superb win...
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Date: 10/9/2012 5:24:00 PM
Oh my.........I just love this, it makes me almost weep, for this sentiment is so so poignant and real, and will hit home to so many. Love it......did I say that already?
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Date: 10/9/2012 2:59:00 PM
beautiful write....congrats on your win
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Date: 10/9/2012 12:27:00 PM
Congratulations on your write. Beautifully written.
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Date: 10/9/2012 11:11:00 AM
a big winner indeed!! a superb write my friend Debbie..Congratulations!!! (^_^) hugs and Cheers!!!
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Date: 10/9/2012 9:56:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I remember being moved the first time I read this.
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Date: 10/9/2012 8:48:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the Diamonds Contest Debbie. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/9/2012 8:42:00 AM
CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR FIRST WIN, DEBBIE. THIS IS REALLY BEAUTIFUL. HUGS:) LG
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Date: 12/16/2011 6:36:00 AM
i really like that poem
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Date: 12/13/2011 6:56:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Debbie. Kim
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Date: 12/12/2011 1:51:00 PM
congrats on your winning poem, ah yes, the eyes have it...your comment on my poem made me laugh debbie, especially about the kleenex! :-)
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Date: 12/12/2011 11:53:00 AM
Debi,Congrats on your win with this creative write.Enjoyed.
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Date: 12/12/2011 8:35:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Susan's "Silver Strands" contest Debbie. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/12/2011 8:08:00 AM
Good poem. Congratulations on the win.
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Date: 12/11/2011 9:14:00 PM
Congratulations Debbie x
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Date: 12/11/2011 6:35:00 PM
A wonderful poem Deb and I loved it! Congratulations! It is much higher in my thoughts.
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Date: 12/11/2011 4:20:00 PM
Debs, I LOVED this one!!!! Congratulations and soupmail.
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Date: 12/11/2011 3:17:00 PM
I rate it much higher. Great reading. Congratulations Debbie. Love, Joyce
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Date: 12/11/2011 2:26:00 PM
Debbie congrats on your win..David
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Date: 12/11/2011 2:11:00 PM
Wow Debbie, this is great. I love free verse. Would have placed this higher. Congrats
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