His Eyes

Ordinary eyes Blue grey- lined with his living Look deep, see his soul For Sami Al-Khalili's contest.

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Nadia Shahwan

Date: 5/4/2009 5:52:00 PM

Beautiful haiku.

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 4/29/2009 11:32:00 PM

Dear Barbara my Barbeeg My LOVE, Excellent entry for Sami's Contest It's not fair I don't know what color YOUR EYES are and EYES was what I was going to write about for this Contest GOOD LUCK ALL MY LOVE ALWAYS...HG

Charlene Bird

Date: 4/26/2009 9:04:00 PM

This is lovely, and the eyes can be so telling with a hint of mystery.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/26/2009 7:30:00 PM

How lovely, Barbara! Nothing ordinary about eyes that reflect the soul. Beautiful haiku! Love, Carolyn

Nadia Shahwan

Date: 4/26/2009 10:30:00 AM

Beautiful haiku.

Christopher Higgins

Date: 4/26/2009 7:03:00 AM

The second line is outstanding...

Raul Moreno

Date: 4/26/2009 12:17:00 AM

Amazing work and nice descriptions. Best of luck in the contest...Raul

Lena Townsend

Date: 4/25/2009 10:07:00 PM

Just a few words wonderfully descibing the depths found in ones eyes. Great luck in the contest. Smiles from Lolita

Barb Geerts

Date: 4/25/2009 9:23:00 PM

Just a few words and yet a masterpiece.. great job

Date: 4/25/2009 8:57:00 PM

You certainly captured the essence of the eyes in this one. Good luck in the contest. Nice use of imagery too. Thank you for sharing your poem with us. Karen

Laurie Ginn

Date: 4/25/2009 8:49:00 PM

So few words but it says everything. Good luck Ms BG.