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I saw her while attending college The ugliest girl on campus Acne scar tissue covered her face Might as well have been hit by a bus My first thought, "that poor girl will NEVER find anyone who wants to marry her". Fate came calling, she sat next to me in class. We started talking, magic allure. Who is this girl ! Her intelligence truly fascinating, could easily challenge me in debate about ANY topic ! Who is she ? Nobody beats me in debate ! Her mind sharp, yet kind The depths of her a fathomless ocean So unique, she can make me laugh ! Heated debate turned into passion. Our hearts pounding as one. Under soft glow of starlight, I asked her to marry Was my best day when she said "yes" 1/8/2017. A true story

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/28/2017 5:53:00 PM

Wow, Bruce. thanks for letting me know about this one. I really enjoyed the read. The ugly duckling wins out!! Soupmail.

Eve Roper

Date: 1/12/2017 10:52:00 PM

Bruce, congratulations on your win Hugs Eve

Julia Ward

Date: 1/10/2017 5:09:00 AM

The only line I would change is the one about "a woman"*, as the girl hasn't reached that stage of her life yet for you to compare. Other than that, well done for this poem's composition, and congratulations to you, Bruce. Thank you for entering my contest. //*You put it in plural anyway, so you need to change that.