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March- 1- 2024

The Rest of the Story Contest

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Hickory Dickory Dock The captain ran up the deck, When the storm rocked the ship. The sailors swayed losing grip. Hickory Dickory Dock Hickory Dickory Dock With no one to direct, the ship hit a rock Into deep waters, it started to sink. All got drowned before they could wink. Hickory Dickory Dock

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Tonye George

Date: 3/4/2024 7:03:00 PM

I keep wondering, do they not know how to swim? I hate it when people drown. Anyway, the sea doesn't care about anyone's skills. Her mouth is too enormous, and so is her taste. Success of the contest dear Valsa

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/3/2024 6:02:00 AM

Whoa!! Sad one. The captain and the pilot definitely need to have it altogether. Reads like a good contender for the contest. Thanks for sharing it and for dropping by my page. Soupmail. Sara K

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/2/2024 12:57:00 PM

ooh hickory dickory dock turned dark! Apparently the lighthouse was not turned on! Great!

Silent One

Date: 3/2/2024 7:27:00 AM

You did a great addition to this fable.. It flows just like the original.. Nicely done Valsa.. All the best in the contest..

Joe Dimino

Date: 3/2/2024 2:32:00 AM

Great imagery, Valsa! Delightful read. Though I hate to smile at tragedy, could not help myself here. Best of luck in contest.

Bill Baker

Date: 3/1/2024 5:25:00 PM

Good luck in the contest Valsa, this is a good entry in my opinion. A fun read and creative way to continue the story. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill

Heidi Sands

Date: 3/1/2024 12:50:00 PM

Well written for the contest Valsa ! :)

Heidi Sands

Date: 3/1/2024 12:50:00 PM

Well written for the contest Valsa ! :)

Jay Narain

Date: 3/1/2024 11:34:00 AM

Sad and dark Nursery rhyme. Though a brilliant composition.

Sotto Poet

Date: 3/1/2024 10:31:00 AM

Dear Valsa. your poem is a stunning work of art, filled with creativity and emotion, despite its melancholic ending. The vivid imagery of "the captain racing across the deck as the ship was tossed by the storm" evokes a sense of worry but also tranquility.

Tom Woody

Date: 3/1/2024 5:41:00 AM

Ha! Well, no happy ending here. Nursery rhymes tend to have a dark side anyway. You took it one step further. Have a great weekend Valsa

Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/1/2024 5:01:00 AM

Not a happy ending lol. Good luck in the contest Valsa. Hope you're keeping well. Tom

Dr. Padmashree R P

Date: 2/29/2024 11:53:00 PM

Wow. Amazing poem. Very creative.