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Here-Gone-Fresh

Here–Gone-Fresh Here Are but Children as They meet the beach Forewarned of rip tides Suction at the Shore eating Their feet Gone Fresh Salt air Filling up The boys’ young lungs Crabs scuttle sideways Seagulls fly free Dive for fish Tides coming Fresh Jill Spagnola aka Sunshine Williams November 13th, 2015 Eve’s Oil Painting 1, 2, 3, any form contest

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/18/2015 8:05:00 PM

Ninette is an interesting form for this challenge and I see you came away with a win GREAT job and congratulations.

Jill Spagnola
Date: 11/19/2015 3:06:00 AM

Thank you Andrea!....:), jill

Paul Callus

Date: 11/18/2015 1:55:00 PM

Love the imagery and appeal to senses, Jill. This form has served you well. Congratulations on a fine podium win. Regards // paul

Jill Spagnola
Date: 11/18/2015 3:33:00 PM

Thank you Paul, I find it helpful to use a form like this on ideas I did not form on my own. It helps me to stay on topic...:), jill

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/18/2015 8:04:00 AM

Well expressed, congrats.

Jill Spagnola
Date: 11/18/2015 3:31:00 PM

Thank you so much Richard!...:), jill

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 11/18/2015 7:24:00 AM

Congrats for your wonderful WIN and verse Jill! ;-)

Jill Spagnola
Date: 11/18/2015 3:30:00 PM

Thanks Teddy!!!....:), jill

Skat A

Date: 11/17/2015 9:53:00 PM

Jill, Congratulations, Have a nice day. SKAT

Jill Spagnola
Date: 11/18/2015 3:29:00 PM

You do the same, thanks SKAT...:), jill

Eve Roper

Date: 11/17/2015 9:48:00 PM

Thank you so very much for composing and submitting a poem in my contest, Jill, congratulations on your win!!! My husband and I truly enjoyed the poem. Hugs dear friend Eve

Jill Spagnola
Date: 11/18/2015 3:28:00 PM

Eve thank you so much for sponsoring this contest based on another of your artistic talents. It took me a while to see that this was not a photograph of the boys but your oil. The beach is one of my favorite places in the world...again thank you....:), jill

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores

Date: 11/17/2015 7:01:00 PM

Congratulations Jill

Jill Spagnola
Date: 11/18/2015 3:28:00 PM

Thank you Nayda...:), jill

Jan Allison

Date: 11/17/2015 6:16:00 PM

You paint a lovely picture using these forms Jill congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Jill Spagnola
Date: 11/18/2015 3:25:00 PM

Thank you so much Jan ox....:), jill

Skat A

Date: 11/14/2015 5:40:00 AM

Jill, you paint a beautiful day. The best of luck. Skat

Jill Spagnola
Date: 11/17/2015 2:55:00 PM

Thank you so much Skat, did you know you are like #1 in this poet community??? You rock...:), jill

Kp Nunez

Date: 11/13/2015 8:31:00 PM

You do well with these succinct writes, right Jill? I find them more challenging, trying to encapsulate the thoughts within a few words within a limited form. All the best! hugs!

Jill Spagnola
Date: 11/17/2015 2:52:00 PM

Yes Kim, sticking to a form helps me from straying off of topic...thank you so much for noticing xxx's!! jill

Jean Murray

Date: 11/13/2015 5:53:00 PM

The first time I read this, I read it as fresh salt water, not air,and feared the worst. Having been caught in a rip tide once at Trivandrum in southern India, I am relieved to think we both survived. Brilliant suspense.

Jill Spagnola
Date: 11/13/2015 7:47:00 PM

Thank you so much Jean ox...:), jill

Eric Boddie

Date: 11/13/2015 4:35:00 PM

here are words that will inspire any....gone is all fear, and it was plenty....fresh is the scene painted by jill....I am just one witness to this Beauty, and that's just keeping it real....;)

Jill Spagnola
Date: 11/13/2015 7:50:00 PM

Thank you Eric, my poem is blushing....:), truly, jill

Cherl Dunn

Date: 11/13/2015 12:03:00 PM

Dear Jill Wow a brilliant piece I'm sure you will do well in the contest because this is very inspirational I'll cross my fingers for you girl, and thanks for your comment, I appreciate your heart felt words on my stuff two, cheri

Jill Spagnola
Date: 11/13/2015 3:43:00 PM

Thank you so much cheri...:), jill

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 11/13/2015 8:06:00 AM

Wow! What a lovely and excellent write. I love how you constructed this. Excellent..............A.M.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 11/13/2015 8:43:00 AM

Don't be discouraged my friend, your write is truly brilliant and your syllables are correct. Beautiful.

Afolabi Muideen
Date: 11/13/2015 8:43:00 AM

Don't be discouraged my friend, your write is truly brilliant and your syllables are correct. Beautiful.

Jill Spagnola
Date: 11/13/2015 8:29:00 AM

Thank you so very much, A.M...This is the first contest I have entered in a while, I was getting discouraged...:), jill