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Her Frightening Impulse

Within her mind suicidal thoughts fester Would she have the strength to continue? With unfaithful love from a jester Inside her mind suicidal thoughts test her With love our good Lord had not blessed her Collecting her thoughts, she just walked away blue Within her mind suicidal thoughts fester Would she have the strength to continue? For Nette's "In the Afterglow" contest by Carolyn Devonshire

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Steven Cooke

Date: 8/15/2011 4:56:00 PM

suicide always makes a good write, i like this,

Jack Horne

Date: 8/15/2011 2:29:00 PM

Love this powerful write, my friend. Many congratulations on all your wins : ) Yes, Fate was about my gran and granddad. I saw a documentary several years ago about the Ice Man - I think he was found in Switzerland - and they found out so much about him and his lifestyle.

Sidney Beck

Date: 8/15/2011 1:35:00 PM

There's always a horrible fascination when there is suicide spoken of...you have caught it right here Carolyn.....well done and congratulations

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 8/15/2011 12:21:00 PM

Congratulations on your win! I really like your phrase "suicidal thoughts fester" :)

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/15/2011 10:47:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Nette's "In The Afterglow" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/14/2011 8:39:00 PM

Congratulations on the win in the contest of nette,Carolyn

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/14/2011 7:49:00 PM

a real posibilty for what she could have been thinking before during & after...congrad's on your win. light & love

Don Johnson

Date: 8/14/2011 7:43:00 PM

thoughts n dreams do intertwine, suicide might kill ya all the time, dinna do it its a paltry crime, get the bitch in happy mode:)

John Freeman

Date: 8/14/2011 5:54:00 PM

Quite the unique take, Carolyn. Congratulations on your worthy poem presentation. Agape, Moses

Gwendolen Song

Date: 8/11/2011 1:37:00 PM

EWWWWWWW!!! Awwwwww! So nice an accompaniment to the picture, Carolyn. You had her suicidal, I thot of her as drug overdosing. Please read my poem United As One that I wrote for your contest and forgot to enter. :( It's just fun to write again after these few months away. Hope u are havin a great day. Gwendolen

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/10/2011 10:22:00 AM

We saw the same theme in that photo, Carolyn,.....such a sad theme, from where poetry sometimes comes....and you have nailed it with this heartwrenching poem. Great poem, and much luck in Nette's contest! (thanks again so much for your soupmails!!)

Judy Ball

Date: 8/9/2011 12:42:00 PM

This is sad my friend but if she commits suidcide the enemy wns. Be strong out of sheer spite and drive him nuts. A man like that feels good about himself when he has a woman grieving over him. She should stop caring out of self preserrvation and gain some self esteem herself. It would really make him upset. ;) Good write. God Bless, JB

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 8/9/2011 9:11:00 AM

sad.....hope you are feeling better!!

Kash Poet

Date: 8/9/2011 4:55:00 AM

Please check the form of Triolet Carolyn...1st ,4th and 7th lines should be same.

James Foulk

Date: 8/8/2011 3:11:00 PM

yes a very stunning piece you wrote, good luck in contest. thank you commenting on Under the Stars and for your concern for my back, i know but i feel i have to comment pain or no pain, but it is hard, i have been on here a while and my back is killing me so have to get off the internet, have a good day and thank you for your support.

Wilma Neels

Date: 8/8/2011 3:01:00 PM

Stunning entry Carolyn, I enjoyed this one. I think we all had our own battles with unfaithfulness in our lives.. It all depends on how we deal with it.. Good luck for Nette's contest.. love Wilma

Joyce Johnson

Date: 8/8/2011 2:17:00 PM

Oh I hope she realizes that jester wasn't worth her love and finds joy again. These contests really work our minds and talents. Good luck Carolyn. We are still getting summer in bits and pieces. We are promised sun this afternoon but the house is so cold I was thinking of turning on the furnace. This will be the famous summer that wasn't here in the North West. Thanks for still reading and commenting. Love, Joyce

Tim B

Date: 8/8/2011 12:47:00 PM

An excellent entry Mrs. Carolyn, a beautiful triolet that begs many questions, gotta hate those jesters! Good luck in the contest.

Jack Horne

Date: 8/8/2011 11:33:00 AM

Lovely triolet, my friend. I hope there was 'light at the end of the tunnel' for her, LOL

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/8/2011 9:06:00 AM

HI, Carolyn, I think our own feelings of helplessness come thru sometimes and I can relate to this one! I made mine pure fantasy!! WAy to do a triolet! Luv, Andrea

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 8/7/2011 10:35:00 PM

Has a lovely glow Carolyn, I enjoyed and wish you a super win in the contest.

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 8/7/2011 10:10:00 PM

So simple and apt for the picture now that I read this imaginative write, Carolyn. A powerful form for these thoughts and words, isn't it? Very very well done. Lookin to see it at the top. Most goodestest poem i've seen for the contest....wellest .. gooderest ...mostest besterest begooderwellerestest goo .... right decent poem! I just gotta get to bed! G'nite {; O

Diane Locksley

Date: 8/7/2011 5:32:00 PM

That's the same thing that came to my mind when I saw the photograph. Here she was sitting on railroad tracks looking pensive. Good luck in Nette's contest! Best to you, Diane

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 8/7/2011 4:53:00 PM

Amazing piece Carolyn... form is a template for all... catching up on all after crazy week at work and with his site..hope your well ...love Michael

Jack Ross Jr.

Date: 8/7/2011 4:08:00 PM

Beautiful write lovely Lady....with love...old Jack.........good luck on contest