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Her Autumn Salt and pepper hair in wisps and thin, criss cross lines on brow and round the chin Eyelids lower like the setting sun resting pools of blue, their day's work done. Like October trees, what leaves remain the colours in her sorrow, in her pain. Within that bony tissue paper shell her kindness and love still intently dwell. Slow breathing and soft pulse inside that frame her soul sat back and played the waiting game. We watched her cast off on that July day in peace, her course set, gently float away. Sailed over the horizon, seeming gone as ships do, she was really sailing on blown by faith's wind to a long promised land she stepped ashore and took her father's hand. ( a sort of reprise on my poem 'Are you there God?') ** Thanks to CayCay Jennings for helping me tidy it up. Luv ya x **

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Date: 1/26/2016 12:05:00 AM
Wow Viv: A truly beautiful master piece. Will fav it to read it again...a 7 +++
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Date: 1/26/2016 12:34:00 AM
Glad you found it enjoyable, Suz, many thanks. Viv x
Date: 10/21/2015 6:04:00 AM
Stunning!... Last two lines gave me chills!...
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Date: 10/20/2015 7:09:00 PM
Oh, this poem is so sweet and touching, Viv! I really enjoyed it's meaning and imagery, and the sadness of leaving, yet the hope of life eternal. A big 7 from me :)
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Date: 10/20/2015 10:40:00 PM
Thanks Laura, where would we be without faith and hope? Viv x
Date: 10/19/2015 11:06:00 PM
So sweet of you to name me. I'm touched. Also, I thank you for the gift that is this poem. YOURS - what I did was minor. There is one problem - every time I read it, I need a tissue ... I hope your pen never goes still before its time ... CayCay
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Date: 10/19/2015 11:34:00 PM
me too, CayCay, me too.... x
Date: 10/19/2015 9:38:00 AM
Hi Viv! Beautiful and yes, awesome metaphors. Kudos to CayCay. 7. hugs!
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Date: 10/19/2015 12:24:00 PM
Thanks Kim, nice to get feedback and a bit of constructive help now and then. Hope you're well, Viv x
Date: 10/18/2015 7:01:00 PM
The metaphors here are outstanding. This is such a heart warmer and heart breaker. You seem to be a saint--since only one as such could write something like this. You have something special.
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Date: 10/18/2015 11:27:00 PM
Very kind, Duke. I think we all write well when it comes to things close to ones heart. Regards, Viv
Date: 10/18/2015 1:34:00 PM
Beautiful write, Viv. Reads beautifully with a beautiful message.
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Date: 10/18/2015 11:28:00 PM
Thanks James, the first couple of drafts were a little ragged, but CayCay kindly stuck her oar in and helped me out, which was good. Regards, Viv
Date: 10/18/2015 8:53:00 AM
"within that bony tissue paper shell"...a metaphoric masterpiece. This is a lovely poem, it touches gently upon the heart and memory.
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Date: 10/18/2015 11:32:00 AM
Thanks, John, for dropping by, sorry I've been a little tied up recently, but hopefully will get chance to touch base with you and the rest of the gang shortly. Appreciate the visit. Regards, Viv
Date: 10/18/2015 8:40:00 AM
- Beautiful and touching written, Viv! (7) - I wish you a lovely Sunday :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/18/2015 11:34:00 AM
Thanks, Anne Lise, elsker, Viv x
Date: 10/18/2015 3:18:00 AM
Oh, Viv - Read it twice, almost cried twice. This is one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read on this site. I found only one couplet awkward, otherwise I found complete poetry perfection. Moving, moving, so very poetically moving. You need never write again, what future words could hold this much meaningful eloquence ... CayCay
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Date: 10/18/2015 3:57:00 AM
very kind, Cay Cay, thanks for making me take a look at it and modify it, I wrote it at five a.m and obviously wasn't concentrating. Hope it works a little better now. If not, soupmail me .Viv x

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