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The sky at night, my only friend A gracious space where I can mend Absorbs my cries when I am torn And heal a heart that's so forlorn This sanctuary brings me peace So the world I'm in can release A quiet pool where hope is born And heal a heart that's so forlorn I've cried I am, to no avail Dear sky my friend let drop the veil So I may see, to never mourn And heal a heart that's so forlorn Could I know the world was lonely It is I that searches only And seeks the sky that stars adorn And heal a heart that's so forlorn For contest Helpless 4/15/14

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Date: 6/9/2014 9:53:00 AM
Frederic, Congratulations, on your win in Cyndi's "HELPLESS, KYRIELLE form CONTEST." take care -LINDA-
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Date: 6/6/2014 8:26:00 PM
Nice meter! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 6/6/2014 11:24:00 AM
Favorite line among many: 'A quiet pool where hope is born'...Great meter and syllable count throughout...LOADS of congrats Frederic! - Tim
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Date: 6/6/2014 5:16:00 AM
Great repeating line..This one has such good rhythm and flow..No wonder it is top of the list..Way to go..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 6/5/2014 9:47:00 PM
wow, I really like this one. I somehow never saw it before now. BIG congrats on your well deserved win.
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Date: 6/5/2014 2:07:00 AM
Perfect Kyrielle with apt take on the theme, congrats on a fine win, frederic
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Date: 6/4/2014 10:23:00 PM
Wonderful write Frederic n so is the win ! big congrats !
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Date: 6/4/2014 3:29:00 PM
Congratulations, Frederic. Great poem and win.
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Frederic Parker
Date: 6/4/2014 6:16:00 PM
thank you Faye for your kindness
Date: 6/4/2014 1:30:00 PM
This is a lovely and expressive poem, Frederic! The healing process can begin once we are ready to accept a situation and try hard to make it work. Hope and faith both have a big say in what we do. Congrats on a merited win.
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Date: 6/4/2014 10:26:00 AM
Congratulations on your win! We really enjoyed your take and the tone you set with this piece. The word gracious really works in that line... forlorn is a word that can seem obsolete, but it really fits in your poem's mood --- timeless. Well done!
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Frederic Parker
Date: 6/4/2014 6:15:00 PM
thank you Cyndi for your kindness, as someone whose work I respect it means something to me
Date: 4/16/2014 10:38:00 AM
A marvelous poem in impressive rhyme scheme and styled muse. Ah wow! Wud u care to review my latest poem too?
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Frederic Parker
Date: 4/16/2014 5:13:00 PM
thank you S.zaynub for your kindness
Date: 4/16/2014 6:37:00 AM
Good luck in the contest, you have a good poem here. :) :)
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Frederic Parker
Date: 4/16/2014 5:14:00 PM
thank you Casarah for your kindness

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