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HEAVY TUMBLING STORY Before forbidden words dawn to confess Come... Come.. C O M E... Uncoil your taste-buds to me Entrust you health fully to thee Yours truly, FOOD ___________________________________ Enamored beyond possible reproach I opened my mouth for crumbs of tasty Crumbs later become spoonfuls Spoonfuls turned to one, two, three plateful Appetite feast in crescendo of daily treats Boosting my body: front and rear - pound per pound My clothes then groan: a cri de couer Yet, desirous mouth craved for more and more Eating up to the crust and core of everything Months passed, Bigger! BIGGER, I come to be. 'Til even walking and standing, I can't do My room - my only day and night intimate boo My children, I robbed tardily of their joys As their focus and attention divided by two Fats stored everywhere on my bod Gradually they are killing me - stealing my breaths An oxygen via prongs must be on beside to help me breathe My back an archipelago of aching ulcer... Comestibles become my sweetest agony Breaking me and my dignity so gently Obesity then my heavy tumbling story... __________________________________________________ Food Can't Live with it can't live without it - Poetry Contest Sponsor Debbie Guzzi ~~~1st Place~~~ ©Olive Eloisa Guillermo 10:51pm, Oct. 17, 2014

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/24/2015 9:19:00 PM

I so often fall into the habit of thinking of you as a little girl- you are a woman wise beyond your years. I am beyond happy seeing you take a #1. Your friend Debbie Congrad's Light & Love

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/28/2015 11:15:00 AM

Debbie I thank you for placing me but more than that thank you for being my friend.. :D! thanks so much!! most of the people here in Soup tells me so.. :D! but I hope my face younger than my age though ahahha.. :D

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 7/24/2015 11:09:00 AM

this is another excellent piece from you, olive, your poetry's just flying, you're on a winning streak! congrats on your top win in the contest :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/28/2015 11:13:00 AM

WEEEEE i just tried to enter this one Charlotte not in my mind to win this high.. :D

Lee Carter

Date: 7/23/2015 10:53:00 AM

Great write Congratulations on your win! ~ lee

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/28/2015 11:12:00 AM

thanks much Lee.. :D1

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/23/2015 9:33:00 AM

Olive,I just stopped by to say congratulations on your well deserved 1st place win:-)Alexis

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/28/2015 11:11:00 AM

thanks much Alexis =')!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/23/2015 8:27:00 AM

Excellent Win!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/28/2015 11:10:00 AM

thanks much Richard Congrats too!

John Lawless

Date: 7/23/2015 6:42:00 AM

Well Olive, I learned a new word today. And this poem calls for us to look at our health and eating habits. The problem,sadly, is often more pronounce in the less affluent communities as they have fewer resources and many parents who work two jobs to make ends meet. Congrats on the top spot in the contest.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/28/2015 11:09:00 AM

Thanks much John.. :D! you are so generous with your comment. :D!

Jan Allison

Date: 7/23/2015 2:09:00 AM

Dropping back with my congratulations Olive:-) hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/26/2015 7:49:00 PM

Thank you so much Jan =')

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/23/2015 12:52:00 AM

Wow U hv been real awesome here, Congrats on first place win dear Olive!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/25/2015 9:29:00 AM

thank so you so much Dr. Upma.. :D!

Skat A

Date: 7/23/2015 12:21:00 AM

Olive, Congratulations on your win, I was amazed by all poem. Forever **SKAT**

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/25/2015 9:02:00 AM

thank you so much SKat... :D!

Val Brooklyn Rogers Blk Panther

Date: 1/6/2015 6:20:00 PM

Wow. You're. Good OR Guillermo. THAT'S a. Lot to digest. EXCELLENT READ.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 1/9/2015 12:43:00 AM

Thanks much VAl :) I appreciate you dropping by.. :)!

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 10/23/2014 4:21:00 AM

archipelago of aching ulcer... You are a juggler Olive. An ace juggler. By the way I cannot understand what Comestibles are. Much love.----rajat

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/23/2014 8:07:00 AM

comestibles is a collective term for food Rajat if used as a noun and if used comestible without "s" it means edible.. :) thanks for the visit.. :)

Paul Callus

Date: 10/19/2014 4:39:00 AM

Hi Olive_eloi!! now who's being greedy!! I have a solution for you....cut down on contests because you are having too many treats every time you win!!!:)). But joking apart...I agree that obesity has to be tackled seriously; it's becoming too common, and it is unhealthy. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/20/2014 2:19:00 AM

hahahaha.... well you too :P!!! hahaahhahaj.. thanks much Paul.. :) well i thought poetry can also be a form to spread awareness.. :)

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/19/2014 3:28:00 AM

beautifully penned from the title olive

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/20/2014 2:16:00 AM

thanks much Lian..:) God bless you..

Arthur Vaso

Date: 10/18/2014 11:11:00 PM

Oh dont worry Olive, there is also nice ways to lose weight too!!!!! Life is balance!!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/19/2014 3:09:00 AM

yes i know!! yup life balance. for youcwhat's the best way to reduce anywa?!

Arthur Vaso

Date: 10/18/2014 11:01:00 PM

Getting fat isnt so bad if you do it together!!! Lets go for ice cream and cake!!!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/18/2014 11:03:00 PM

hahahha :D yes let's go!!!! :D :) :P but well not to much anyway. :D!!!

Jan Allison

Date: 10/17/2014 5:55:00 PM

you have portrayed this sad state of affairs perfectly Olive:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/19/2014 3:10:00 AM

thanks much sweet Jan.. :)

James Fraser

Date: 10/17/2014 12:34:00 PM

Fine write on a condition/subject so rife in today's society - James :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/20/2014 2:22:00 AM

Discipline begins at home.. :) and well control..

James Fraser
Date: 10/18/2014 11:46:00 AM

I think Parents could do a little more to stem their kids from becoming Obese. Imagine what you could make with the monies spent in McDonald's for a family of four, and what you could buy for the same monies in a Supermarket!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/18/2014 10:09:00 AM

mr, JAmes thanks much.. :)

Sarita Brewer

Date: 10/17/2014 11:06:00 AM

Your poem is a taste of truth.... ^_^

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/18/2014 7:34:00 AM

thank you Sarita.. :) Indeed..