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Heartbeats

Thump, thump...thump, thump Your heart beats with internal impediment Making each breath a struggle. I see your pain, I feel your anguish, I dearly love your determination to endure. I can only imagine how difficult it is to relinquish days of youth when your strength was the marvel of the men you worked with side by side...celebrated as the Paul Bunyan of the shipyard whose power knew no bounds. Advancing years have garnered fears of imminent shadows from the Grim Reaper inching closer day by day until you can feel his breath on the nape of your neck. Past regrets loom before you of missed opportunities, and so many things left unaccomplished, unattended projects that act as brutish reminders of failing health. You think I don't understand the dilemmas you face in just getting through another hellish night of insomnia to sleepwalk through another day plagued by doubts of Time slipping away like a thief in the night. I want to be here for you...with you. Please let me be. 7-26-18

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Vladislav Raven

Date: 11/14/2018 5:26:00 PM

Hi Connie, this wonderful poem does touch the heart so softly. This one has come from your heart, This one does bring a tear to the eye. This is true, real poetry with real emotions. Have a wonderful Thursday. Hugs....Mike. XX

Barbara Barry-Nishanian

Date: 9/20/2018 11:58:00 PM

I pray he will let you be there for him.. It's difficult for the proud to humble themselves and admit they need or will need help. Christ was a good example of humility, showed us it's o.k. to ask for help. Pray you'll have the patience needed. Fantastic win..congrats!

Caycay Jennings

Date: 8/25/2018 10:51:00 PM

This heart felt empathy and plea move me so much because I'm sure you are speaking to your special man. I could feel you in each line and know this write was probably therapeutic and worthy of your journal. Your sweet, tender heart is quite clearly defined in this piece, this poem of love. Love ... CayCay

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/25/2018 11:02:00 PM

True CayCay. I worry about his heart and wish I could do more. Love, Connie You have left me so many comments today. : ) bless you!

Robertina B.

Date: 8/18/2018 6:06:00 PM

Connie, belated congratulations on your win.. A beautifully written and inspirational , free verse.. I had a heartfelt moment reading your wonderful creativity.. Many blessings, my friend..

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/19/2018 7:07:00 PM

Thank you very much Robertina! It is a personal poem. : )

Manmath Dalei

Date: 8/9/2018 7:26:00 AM

Dear Connie, Very brilliant write. Ending is outstanding. Loved your concept.......with love//Manmath

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/5/2018 1:56:00 PM

Just back seeing the reply you gave on my comment. Wish I COULD slow down. I completely spaced out on a contest closing recently. I simply cannot keep up. I just want to watch Netflix!!!

Susan Gentry

Date: 8/1/2018 7:17:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. This touched my heart.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/2/2018 1:55:00 AM

Thank you very much Susan. This was not fictional. I appreciate your words my friend. : )

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/1/2018 3:44:00 PM

Connie, i am not at the contest page to see which placement you got, but I hope it was high. Because that is what it deserved. I got a bad flat tire and just took my car across the street from my job to get two new tires. I need to hurry over there and get my car and get home. Sink full of dishes to wash. Other things to do. OH MY!

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 8/2/2018 1:53:00 AM

Oh no, I feel for you Andrea. I was very pleased that this poem was in the top three. So, thank you Andrea. Try to slow down to enjoy poetry. : )

Sandra Haight

Date: 7/31/2018 4:48:00 PM

So very sad, Connie, but so emotionally conveyed in your beautifully written heartfelt poem. Your words fit so well for us too in watching someone we love 'sleepwalking heartbeats', and so, a Fave for me. Congratulations on your win. Hugs, Sandra

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/31/2018 5:44:00 PM

Oh Thank you very much Sandra. This poem is personal. I truly appreciate your kind words and the fave. xxoo

John Hamilton

Date: 7/31/2018 9:42:00 AM

Wonderful writing Connie, congrats on a fine win!

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/31/2018 4:35:00 PM

Thank you very much for putting this in the top three. I thought your top choice was excellent. : )

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/30/2018 7:56:00 AM

Some of us can so deeply relate to the truth , and depth of heart in this superbly crafted and very inspiring poem my dear friend. You captured so much of the sorrow and regrets that are a part of life. A fav and a precious gem too.

Paul Callus

Date: 7/30/2018 1:31:00 AM

Time takes its toll on us, Connie, but not all of us can deal with it, especially where physical changes are concerned. Unfortunately it could effect and strain relationships. One has to rely on patience and understanding. Your expressive words come from deep within and touch the reader's heart. Caren's end comment makes a lot of sense. Warm regards // paul

Laura Leiser

Date: 7/28/2018 10:27:00 PM

Your poem superbly addresses the passing of time and the regrets of things left undone. Excellent, Connie! :)

Eric Boddie

Date: 7/27/2018 12:08:00 PM

as we progress through Life....we grow stronger through the struggle and strife....then at some point we reach our peak....and we push on and start to get weak....until we are reduced to the assistance of others....which is why we need to Love all our sisters and brothers....Love this write connie….we just never know when we will need help....;)

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/27/2018 3:39:00 PM

So true Eric. It is the strongest that are proud who find it hardest to accept help. Thank you for your depth of understanding in your youth my friend. : )

Warren Doll

Date: 7/27/2018 8:23:00 AM

So well penned ,Connie You have expressed so, so ,much in this free verse. Going into my Favs. // Warren :)

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/27/2018 11:55:00 AM

Awww thank you Warren. I truly appreciate your comnent and the fave! Blessings, Connie : ) xxoo

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/26/2018 6:30:00 PM

wow, Connie. OUtstanding work from you and so heartfelt. FAVE

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/27/2018 11:56:00 AM

You know from whence it derives Andrea. I am so happy you liked this enough to fave. Thank you my friend! : )

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/26/2018 4:16:00 PM

Advancing years takes so much away, I am so glad you are there for this certain someone. When we need you the most we will push you away the hardest, especially the ones you love.

Lyric Man

Date: 7/26/2018 1:14:00 PM

Connie.. it's such a horrible feeling to not be able to stay awake in the day can't can't sleep at night. It's a real and growing problem. Blame it on stress!

Charlie Smith

Date: 7/26/2018 1:08:00 PM

Great take on sleepwalking Connie, I assume for the contest, best wishes...