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He Doesn'T Shhhh Me Anymore

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He told me to be quiet each time I tried to speak knowing I'd obey for he believed I was meek Months went by and I acquiesced to his wishes until I had enough and started flinging dishes "Shhh," he said and placed a vile finger to his lips I had enough of him and put my hands on my hips "You can't tell me who to talk to. I'll not be quiet If you think I'll stand for this, go ahead and try it." He thought I was joking. Well wasn't he the fool? I won't be used by any man. I'm not any man's tool He's buried in the backyard in an unmarked grave I bet now he knows I wasn't going to be his slave Each night I dress in widow's black and take a walk Mascara running from tears of joy, I give him a talk I lay a finger against my lips, then I smile and say, "Shhh, you know it's your fault you had to go away."

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Geoffrey Brewer

Date: 8/26/2017 9:39:00 PM

A gripping sardonic tale that gives a frisson of dark poetic pleasure. Well done Lin.

Lin Lane
Date: 9/10/2023 8:08:00 PM

An overlooked comment from years gone by. Sorry, Geoffrey.

Agnes Krampe

Date: 7/9/2017 8:11:00 AM

This is great! I was drawn in from teh beginning and interested in where this might go... love the dark twist. Very belated congrats on POTD (which I must have missed)

Lin Lane
Date: 7/9/2017 9:09:00 AM

Thank you very much, Agnes. You didn't miss a thing now. ;-)

Jan Allison

Date: 7/6/2017 6:25:00 PM

Lin I had to drop by and see the comments since you got POTD - wow you got one from TPS I dont think I have never had that honour:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 7/6/2017 6:41:00 PM

Hi, Jan. Is it?

Team Poetrysoup

Date: 7/6/2017 4:25:00 PM

This is a great poem!

Carole Duet

Date: 7/4/2017 4:23:00 AM

You sound like me...wish the dishes a-flying! lol This poem is hilarious! Just love it.

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 7/1/2017 10:43:00 AM

LOL! Love this clever write, Lin! "Mascara running from tears of joy" this is a veritable hoot! :)) This piece reminds me of something I'd endured. Had been joyfully buried, but he had returned with other spooks.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/1/2017 10:55:00 AM

Thanks for the laughter, and I don't mind touching up my mascara. That's an easier fix than burying another body. Call me if you need help getting rid of those spooks.

Indiana Shaw

Date: 6/30/2017 2:05:00 PM

Ha ha ha - so brilliantly and humorously wrote - well at least I hope so . . . (*o* )

Lin Lane
Date: 7/1/2017 10:53:00 AM

Thanks for appreciating the humor in this one, Indiana. ;-)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/25/2017 10:27:00 PM

Sometimes it helps to vent Lin. I hope this poem was cathartic for you. Relationships are never easy are they? : )

Lin Lane
Date: 6/27/2017 5:37:00 AM

I ended my vent at him a couple of years ago, but sometimes a spark ignites with a memory. He's not buried in the back yard, but he's dead to me. Thanks so much, Connie.

Debbie Duncan

Date: 6/24/2017 8:09:00 PM

I love this, awesome write. Once you do this you can't go back :) I knew when I saw pic of girl it would be great write. Love the write.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/27/2017 5:35:00 AM

Thank you, Debbie. Glad you like the drawing. She was perfect for the message.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 6/19/2017 12:40:00 PM

A cold, dark Gothic gem of a poem, Lin. The rhymes all rock. You got the verve, whacking the nerves. Laying down the law w/the best. Making poetic promises that we ain't seen the last of you yet. Super cool write. Kudos for POTD. Stellar poetry from one of my favorite poetesses. Love and hugs always.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/19/2017 2:35:00 PM

Thanks for all the great compliments, Freddie.

Lenna Walker

Date: 6/19/2017 11:59:00 AM

"He thought I was joking. Well wasn't he the fool?" I can really relate to whole write, but that line ......... you showed him. I contemplated a backyard burial at one point, but never went through with it... lol . Spot on with that last line too !! Fun read Lin !!

Lenna Walker
Date: 6/23/2017 12:32:00 PM

Happier that I DIDN'T use my backyard as a burial ground, lmao

Lin Lane
Date: 6/19/2017 2:34:00 PM

Thanks a lot, Lenna. I'm glad you enjoyed it and happier that you use your back yard as a burial ground!

Funom Makama

Date: 6/17/2017 9:39:00 AM

Hello friend. Its been a while. LORD! This is just vintage you! Excellent, Awesome and a master in this covetous craft of writing. Keep on flowing the ink of your mind. A 7 for sure.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/17/2017 9:42:00 AM

It has been a while, and I was not active for several months on this site. It's nice to see you and I gratefully accept your kind comments, Funom.

Wilma Neels

Date: 6/13/2017 7:24:00 AM

Lin, I enjoyed your twist.. you surely showed him. You silenced him forever ;) needless to say this was a joy to read!

Lin Lane
Date: 6/13/2017 8:25:00 AM

Yes, I did, Wilma. I put up with his audacity for too long...haha. Thanks for finding joy and humor in this one.

Paul Callus

Date: 6/13/2017 4:18:00 AM

Some men take their women too much for granted. They don't realize that there is a limit to everything! I love how this 'relationship' worked out at the end, Lin. Can you blame a victim for retaliating!! ~ Regards // paul

Lin Lane
Date: 6/13/2017 8:24:00 AM

You are such a gentleman, Paul. I've always recognized that quality in you. It was a fun write even though I went a little stark raving mad. thanks for your great comments.

Shirley Rebstock

Date: 6/12/2017 7:48:00 PM

That will teach him. Love it, dangerous, but funny

Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 10:25:00 PM

Yes, it sure did. Thank you, Shirley.

White Wolf

Date: 6/12/2017 5:21:00 PM

An awesome write, Lin! And congrats to you

Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 10:24:00 PM

Thanks ever so much, WW.

Bl Devnath

Date: 6/12/2017 1:45:00 PM

i am obedient to my D always my dear lovely friend. Wonderfully pictured. A great congrats on POTD. Loved always, bl

Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 4:54:00 PM

Thanks so much, BL.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/12/2017 12:47:00 PM

I am glad to see you get POTD, with this splendid write! :) Congrats!

Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 4:53:00 PM

Your thoughts and remarks are always a welcome sight, AV. Thanks.

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 6/12/2017 12:42:00 PM

*giggle* I love this Lin! Congrats on potd and fave ;) xomo!

Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 4:53:00 PM

Thanks so much, Maureen.

Charlie Smith

Date: 6/12/2017 11:11:00 AM

Don't guess he'll do that again...Congratulations for POTD honors.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 11:13:00 AM

Ha...good one, Charlie, and I don't have plans to dig him up to find out. Thanks for your humor, my friend.

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/12/2017 10:51:00 AM

Hi Lin, Congratulations on getting the poem of day. It waz most definitely well deserved:-) Alexis

Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 11:02:00 AM

Thanks so very much for your thoughts, Alexis. They're always appreciated.

Dean Wood

Date: 6/12/2017 10:45:00 AM

Whoa! Remind me not to cross you Lin. Congratulations on your recognition with POTD. - Dean

Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 11:02:00 AM

If you even come close to offending me, Dean, I'll let you know. haha Thanks so much.

Winged Warrior

Date: 6/12/2017 10:37:00 AM

Congrats!!! on (((POTD))) Lin...very funny I hope...just the same...don't know if I'd come over for dinner anymore lol...all the best...^WW^

Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 11:01:00 AM

You're not to worry, my warrior friend. You've never shushed me. Thank you for your well wishes, and they are sent back to you.

Jan Allison

Date: 6/12/2017 10:27:00 AM

Many many congrats Lin on POTD this will always be a fave for me;-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 11:00:00 AM

Thanks bunches, Jan, for faving this one. I let fly with the ammo on this one, didn't I?

Akkina Downing

Date: 6/12/2017 10:07:00 AM

Lol... I'm sorry I didn't mean laugh but the ending is perfect. I love it! Congratulation on your awesome potd, Lin... hugs :)

Lin Lane
Date: 6/12/2017 10:59:00 AM

Please laugh all you like. I laughed a titch at myself after reading it aloud. Thanks for liking this one, Akkina.