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He Crowed the Night

The sound of the cicadas, piercing in the darkness, dree ... They massed thunderous, unobserved sounds nocturnal, dree ... crashing through the high it ... of and in .. wild ... disturbed, dree ... In alarm the crow forgot him, the other, the sand, the surf and the sixty gray rocks below the tree tops there A friend was he of daylight, his special ways taught all. but, the first move was black, now cut against the too far off feet of that night. It is the other thing he never could cry over ... death ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ There you go Charlotte ;) In the darkness there is death. It was the first thing that they taught him and he never forgot it he could move unobserved in daylight too; in other ways. But the night was his special friend. Now the high piercing sound of the alarm cut through all other nocturnal sounds: the dree dree dree of the cicadas, the thunderous crashing of the surf against the gray sand and the black rocks, sixty feet below, the wild cry of a disturbed crow far off over the massed tree tops. By Eric V. Lustbader The Ninja

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 3/31/2014 10:20:00 PM
DEBBIE, Congratulations :) awesome winning poem..... XOX ~LINDA
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Date: 3/31/2014 1:49:00 AM
Thank you Debbie for your always welcome comments on my endeavours.I only write in structured prose now as it sems to fit best with recitation thereof ,which I feel is the natural conclusion for every poem (of whatever form).Congrats on your blog on faith .Rgds Brian
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Date: 3/28/2014 10:37:00 AM
This is a brilliant piece, CArrie.. Congratulations on your fine win!! :'))
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Date: 3/26/2014 6:22:00 PM
You've constructed this poem brilliantly. Nicely done and a well deserved win. Congratulations Debbie - Connie
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Date: 3/26/2014 6:16:00 AM
Very creative to pen a collage poem and congrats on the win, debbie
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Date: 3/25/2014 11:04:00 PM
Well done Debbie and Congrats on win. Verlena
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Date: 3/25/2014 10:18:00 PM
Wow...rearranged with style....congratulations debbie
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Date: 3/25/2014 6:35:00 PM
debbie, you did so well with this one! surreal, but with some coherence at the same time; you created a definite mood with the arranged words, which was what I was looking for - congrats on your win in my contest :)
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 3/25/2014 7:34:00 PM
I cut out all the words and laid them on a black board and sorted by noun verb adjective preposition etc. & went from there ;)
Date: 3/25/2014 5:25:00 PM
Wasn't this fun??!!! I loved this idea of trying to make sense of random words/sentences.. A fun contest, and your is stunning!
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Date: 3/25/2014 5:12:00 PM
Hi Debbie, Enjoyed reading it. cleverly constructed. Regards Theresa xx
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Date: 3/21/2014 1:47:00 PM
Nice "call and response" work here. I remember the Cicadas of summer! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 3/20/2014 9:50:00 PM
Way to be inspired, Debs!! Long time, no see!!
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Date: 3/20/2014 3:01:00 AM
Cicadas are very loud during those summer nights. You have described everything here decently well the way you usually do. Good job Debbie.
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