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Hazy Evening Mist

In that stillness of a meadow Quite uncanny yet deep, When birds were mute and every tree Gasped feebly… all asleep, Throughout one hazy evening mist Along my grief’s replay; The tempo of the air echoed From crackled weeds that day. For in the hush so absolute Which murmured soft…unclear I heard a drawl of fog wafting Only my soul could hear : A rustle through the pewter leaves A quiver on the knoll… Eyes paused for just ahead of me , This vision seemed to stroll. O form of my late love emerged Consoling time’s ordeal ; He was the very spirit of That gentle meadow feel. ------------ Five Rhyming Stanzas - 5 only Broken Wing’s Contest 8.26.2016 ------------------ Rhyme scheme: XaXa, 8/6/8/6 syl count Checked through www.how manysyllables.com

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Date: 10/3/2016 3:49:00 PM
Great poem, congratulations!
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Date: 8/31/2016 4:36:00 PM
A beautiful gentle poem many congrats Nette:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/29/2016 4:21:00 PM
Nette, congratulations on your win in my contest with this lovely write ~
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Date: 8/29/2016 12:35:00 PM
Lovely, congratulations on your win!
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Date: 8/29/2016 12:01:00 PM
Lovely. Congratulations Nette, terrific win...
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Date: 8/29/2016 10:38:00 AM
Hi Nette, Congratulations on your top win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis
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Date: 8/29/2016 9:52:00 AM
Leave a sensation sublime and the imagery so powerful. Enjoyed. Congrats on your 1st place, well deserved! :) Sunita
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Date: 8/29/2016 9:25:00 AM
Great write, Nette, congratulations on your win Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/26/2016 10:13:00 PM
A gentle feel nette...really enjoyed
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Date: 8/26/2016 7:30:00 PM
Shades of Heathcliff and Kathy. Love your misty specter, "only soul could hear." Love, daver
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Date: 8/26/2016 4:49:00 PM
Nette, you are such a fine poet. The wording, the imagery and then the remembrance of love "that gentle meadow feel" I love it!
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Date: 8/26/2016 2:01:00 PM
Our family cottage is in a small place called "meadowville" this reminds of there, so sweet!
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Date: 8/26/2016 12:48:00 PM
- Always a pleasure to read your beautiful poems, Nette - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/26/2016 4:03:00 AM
An amazing piece...you have weaved the beauty of eternal love with stunning nature imagery. Your word choice adds great depth of meaning and elevates the delicate emotional feel. A truly lovely poem artfully penned :-) My best to you in the contest. blessings, lynn
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Date: 8/26/2016 12:34:00 AM
Such profoundness in your magnificent poem. Isn't love eternal?
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