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Hawaiian Winds

The humid Hawaiian heat hobbles my head and heart too, Hitting as the Humvee high-tails past on the highway, Sweat seeps steadily south from scalp to shoes Convection current cooking, keep pedaling, pores crying. Howling Haleakala Headwinds hammer hard, Freezing face, fingers, and forehead. Wistfully watching the warm water Westward; Blasting breeze’s blows batter my body backward. Soft saline sea spray spritzes the sunbathers As the surges' steady smashing against the shore Rhythmically rocks the run-down revelers to a sweet, sun-kissed, seaside sleep once more. For Elements Part 2—Wind Contest (First Place) Sponsored by Brian Davey Judged 3/29/16

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Date: 3/30/2016 6:12:00 PM
I live in Idaho, but in less than a month I'm moving to Georgia ... lots of packing to do! My brother's been to Hawaii a couple of times, trying to work on those organic farms over there with free room and board ... each time it didn't seem to work out though.
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/30/2016 9:47:00 PM
Idaho to GA? Wow. There's a change. Work? Love? School? Gotta be something worthy of an epic poem there. :-)
Date: 3/30/2016 5:59:00 PM
Stellar use of alliteration, Tom. And I love the subject matter of biking, as I love to bike by the riverside under the shaded trees in the summertime (though preferably away from any Humvees) ... You sure an impressive writer, my friend. Hitting first place yet again. Well done! So you do really live in Hawaii then?
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/30/2016 6:08:00 PM
Thanks! We live in Southern AZ, but have family on the Big Island of HI. Always nice to have an excuse!! Going there next month. You?
Date: 3/30/2016 1:24:00 PM
Hi Tom, Fantastic imagery and illiteration. Congrats on your #1st place W. Cheers, Brian
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/30/2016 5:48:00 PM
Thanks, Brian!
Date: 3/30/2016 12:19:00 PM
Hi Tom. Congrats for your first placement in the contest!!! ;-)
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/30/2016 5:48:00 PM
Thanks, Teddy!
Date: 3/30/2016 8:45:00 AM
A celebration of alliteration...In a thoughtful presentation....Congratulation...
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Probir Gupta
Date: 3/30/2016 7:52:00 PM
A nice crutch, in these hours in lurch, thanks very much...
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/30/2016 5:49:00 PM
I thank you much, that's a nice touch, to congratulate as such!
Date: 3/30/2016 6:47:00 AM
Congratulations, wonderful write and win...
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/30/2016 8:22:00 AM
Thanks, Charlie!
Date: 3/30/2016 5:56:00 AM
Great poem! Great win!!
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/30/2016 8:22:00 AM
Thanks, Terry!
Date: 3/30/2016 2:33:00 AM
good job on your win!
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/30/2016 8:23:00 AM
Thank you, Magan!
Date: 3/30/2016 12:56:00 AM
Wonderful poetry n win Tom.. big congrats!
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/30/2016 8:23:00 AM
Thanks, Doc!
Date: 3/29/2016 1:58:00 PM
Congratulations on taking the top spot Tom. You did an outstanding job of describing, with well chosen alliteration, an experience here in Hawaii. My hats off to you Tom! Kudos! #7 ; )
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/30/2016 8:25:00 AM
Thank you, Connie!
Date: 3/29/2016 12:55:00 PM
Really nice write, Tom. I think the alliteration was probably the tipping point. Congratulations on your winning poem. Peace my friend:)
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/30/2016 8:25:00 AM
Thanks, Daniel!
Date: 3/29/2016 12:37:00 PM
Great description and use of alliteration, Tom. Congrats on your First Place win! Sandra
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/29/2016 12:49:00 PM
Thanks, Sandra! Yours was every bit as deserving!
Date: 3/29/2016 4:34:00 AM
Wow Tom the description and alliteration are fabulous - no wonder you clinched the top spot:-) hugs Jan xx7
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/29/2016 6:42:00 AM
Thanks, Jan!
Date: 3/29/2016 3:49:00 AM
Congratulations on your top placement in my elements contest Tom! Your use of alliteration while writing about such a specific place was brilliant. Thank you for entering
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/29/2016 6:42:00 AM
Thanks for the contest! I love the topic, and your parameters really pushed me to do things I hadn't done before...lots of fun. :-)
Date: 3/26/2016 9:00:00 PM
Excellent poem Tom. My best wishes for the contest
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/27/2016 8:13:00 AM
Thanks, Nayda!
Date: 3/21/2016 9:33:00 PM
Hey Tom, read this and experienced three different faces of Hawaii...and did also relax at the end! Very visual write!
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Tom Quigley
Date: 3/21/2016 10:31:00 PM
Thanks, Walter!

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