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A Victorian house kept in perfect shape, A garden that made a beautiful landscape. A notice stated it was for a quick sale, But do beware of the ghost and its foul wail. It was the ideal place I had in mind, A guest house with staunch brave guests that were inclined, To stay and face the evil ghost of the night, A hefty fat fee to make me rich and bright. The door was open, saw all was in order, Already felt like a great castle warder. I lit as many candles as I could find, Victorian furniture I had in mind. Behind me a wail and the big door slammed shut An ugly witch appeared but I had the gut To stand up to her and gave her a big fight: ”Is that how you present yourself this dark night?” “And how would you have me, my dear grandmaster, A lovely lady, displaying an aster?” I turned on her, now she had found the right scheme. Her mien quickly changed, and my eyes had to gleam. “You will keep your lovely looks in perfect shape, My rich guests will admire and probably gape, No loud wails or shrieks but you can softly moan, Then in the darkness, you'll leave your guests alone. I must warn you, no fancy sleeping with guests, They will die and surely will never find rest. I'll have to find other ghosts to run this place My son will be a cashier, he's full of grace.” ”Oh, you must be some kind of devilish host.” I smiled, hugged her and whispered "I am a ghost." Placed 1 25 February 2023 Writing Challenge -H Words - Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France Written in couplets. 11 Syllables per line.

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Date: 3/20/2023 9:51:00 PM
Wow Victor, this is an awesome write! Spooky, funny, and full of surprises! :)
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Date: 3/12/2023 4:46:00 AM
Exceptional Victor. A wonderful poem. Definitely a favorite for me. Amazing, well written and so funny
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Date: 3/2/2023 12:54:00 AM
Victor, excellent writing on the haunted theme and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge - H Words, well done, blessings, Constance
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Date: 3/1/2023 7:45:00 AM
Coming back to enjoy this stellar poem and give my warm Congratulations on your win my dear friend Victor! Thanks as always. Blessings.
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Date: 2/28/2023 7:03:00 PM
Hey, hey.. Victor. I know you don't enter too many contests these days, so I was so happy to see this at the top of the totem pole. You are a very talented poet and you have inspired me with some of your gems. Congratulations on achieving a first-place win...and I am honored to share it with such a fine poet as yourself. ~
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Date: 2/28/2023 1:24:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. What a creative story/write/ending. Have a blessed day.............
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Date: 2/28/2023 10:10:00 AM
- Back with a congratulations, Victor :) - hugs
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Date: 2/28/2023 9:46:00 AM
Back with big Congratulations, Victor, on the top-winning achievement; your poem is so lovely, and I like the way you depicted the striking metaphors.
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Date: 2/28/2023 9:41:00 AM
Dear Victor, What an interesting and enchanting tale, said so poetically! "I am a ghost" adds the final exclamation point! Congratulations!
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Date: 2/28/2023 4:08:00 AM
Wow and Wow again Victor. Hello. This is a masterpiece. You are never at a loss of words creativity imagery or story telling to which we are all in the scene. Be very proud of this well thought and very skilled entry. Truly. Always do you leave us on a wonderful note and closing ending. Thank you for sharing. Have a wonderful day filled wtih peace beauty and more. Love and Blessings always. (smile)
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Date: 2/27/2023 3:47:00 PM
Victor, well done and with a cute ending.
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Date: 2/27/2023 5:15:00 AM
What a fun tale with a fantastic ending. You had me fooled. For it was a ghost setting all things in order! Hugs ~ Kim
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Date: 2/27/2023 2:55:00 AM
The twist at the end was never expected . You have created a spooky scenario. Great entry. All the best dear friend.
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Date: 2/26/2023 11:23:00 PM
What an astonishing story, a strange meeting in this victorian house, the punchline is wonderful yann
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Date: 2/26/2023 10:01:00 AM
love this and the cute ending, Victor.
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Date: 2/26/2023 5:52:00 AM
Ain’t ghost stories the best Victor, we can take them anywhere, just like you did here, I’d say you were laughing to yourself writing this one, I certainly got a laugh from it, you gotta love that punchline, cheers David
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Date: 2/26/2023 5:40:00 AM
Indeed Victor, you have woven lightness and humor through this marvelous story! The imagery is also fantastic as the backdrop of its unearthly characters! Well done!!
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Date: 2/26/2023 5:02:00 AM
Wonderful, Victor, with your famous last line twist:) enjoyed thoroughly:)
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Date: 2/26/2023 3:47:00 AM
lol your full of surprises Victor, who would have expected this ending. I always loved stories of haunted houses. Much enjoyed it , Have a great Sunday dear friend.
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Date: 2/25/2023 11:52:00 PM
You're both a great story teller and a great poet my dear friend Victor. I enjoyed reading this delightful and interesting ghost story of yours a lot. Thanks a lot for sharing and best wishes in the contest. Hugs.
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Date: 2/25/2023 11:46:00 PM
A ghostly story/poem perfectly told Victor, one would have to be brave to stay in a place that has a ghost for a host. Excellent! ~ Belle
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Date: 2/25/2023 11:18:00 PM
I loved this, you have a great well to tell such wonderful stories in poetry!
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Date: 2/25/2023 7:09:00 PM
Haunting the Haunted. Great story telling, Victor. Good luck in the contest. Take care, Shirley.
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Date: 2/25/2023 7:04:00 PM
Haunting the Haunted. Great story telling, Victor. Good luck in the contest. Take care, Shirley.
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Date: 2/25/2023 1:22:00 PM
- I would love to be there ... scary and exciting ... a fabulous poem, Victor - Best wishes in the contest ... a top winning poem :) - Have a lovely weekend :) - hugs
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