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Haiku Six

I find your name rolling across my tongue but you never come true days of old gone words dripped on pages and I read them still bees are buzzing with bliss honey drips from tongue buckets filled with rum eyes of blue you are so true I'm still leaving you you call my name I'm going the opposite way I just don't have time for you today we were the best of friends it was the best of times then love got in the way I wrote these "all" in 2011, I know they're not the 5 - 7 - 5, but here I am posting.

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John Posey

Date: 9/15/2013 6:35:00 PM

Debbie, sometimes I believe we let form limit our emotion. We strain to meet the rules and somehow lose the core intent of the verse..... I loved it and never counted any syllables at all.... Jake

Sean Goodwin

Date: 4/20/2013 12:05:00 PM

Very unique; penned with much emotion. I like how it ended. The 3rd one is just sublime! -- Sean

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/18/2013 6:47:00 PM

Debbie, your haiku are perfect I like the 3rd one... and for some reason I feel as if you had fun writing down these haiku,,,,, always~ Linda

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/19/2013 1:08:00 AM

Thank you Linda, I did have fun ;}

Anthony O. Mitchell Jr.

Date: 4/7/2013 11:29:00 PM

Nicely done, I enjoyed all of your work to this point and looking forward to reading more.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/8/2013 12:55:00 AM

Thank you ;}

Holly Moore

Date: 4/5/2013 10:18:00 AM

I think they are very beautifully expressed. 54321, whatever, right? Much emotion, here. Thanks for your comment on my site....xxoo Holly Moore

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/5/2013 3:08:00 PM

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Suzanne Delaney

Date: 4/4/2013 8:13:00 PM

An enjoyable set and quite jaunty in their own way .......glad you had time for me today.....tee hee SuZ

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/4/2013 8:56:00 PM

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Bl Devnath

Date: 4/4/2013 10:41:00 AM

Beautiful one. Loved always, bl

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/4/2013 2:22:00 PM

Thank you

Duke Beaufort

Date: 4/1/2013 6:28:00 AM

What I think you have said here is that time and love have so many different outcomes. The license you have taken with the 5-7-5 only adds to the setting. So you are a free spirit. Me--I have decided to stick to one form just for the sake of ease and image. You have my admiration and respect for all that you do with words. I do so enjoy looking at your writing. You are so cool!

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/2/2013 6:12:00 PM

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Jeremy Martin

Date: 3/27/2013 10:07:00 PM

'honey drips from the tongue buckets full of rum' Yes! Gorgeous.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 3/28/2013 5:03:00 PM

thank you, my fav lines too ;}

Matthew Anish

Date: 3/14/2013 10:55:00 AM

Haikus don't have to be 5 7 5 - they can be different because the 5 7 5 relates to an Asian form. Love gets in the way of a lot of things. Stimulating work here! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Debbie Duncan
Date: 3/14/2013 2:48:00 PM

Thanks for reading ;}

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/6/2013 2:39:00 PM

.... I do not count ....... It is YOUR (!) Haiku! - And it is very well written!! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Debbie Duncan
Date: 3/6/2013 10:34:00 PM

Thank you Anne ;}

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/5/2013 8:56:00 PM

Debbie, I am really glad you posted these because they make for a very fun read. The first two are my very favorites. They are all very sweet how they relate to love.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 3/6/2013 10:15:00 PM

Thank you Andrea ;}

Donna Jones

Date: 3/5/2013 5:12:00 PM

I love your writing Debbie, you seem like an old friend to me.....

Debbie Duncan
Date: 3/6/2013 9:59:00 PM

Thank you Donna ;}

Duke Beaufort

Date: 3/5/2013 4:19:00 PM

These are a lot of fun. You are definitely your own person! Thank-you for all your comments.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 3/5/2013 9:38:00 PM

Thank you Duke

Harry Horsman

Date: 3/5/2013 3:26:00 PM

lovely to read Debbie.. and that is what counts..

Debbie Duncan
Date: 3/5/2013 6:26:00 PM

Thank you harry ;}

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/5/2013 8:13:00 AM

Expressive work...Enjoyed reading this one today..Thanks for stopping by ..There are two ways to write ABC form under that form on this site..One is much easier than the other...Cyndi that sponsored the contest required couplets about topics listed with a couplet at the end summarizing the poem..So it was hard..I ran the idea over and over in my thoughts for days and figured that the contest was closed then started writing ..I then looked and the contest wasn't closed so I entered..Sara

Debbie Duncan
Date: 3/5/2013 5:50:00 PM

Thank you Sara,,

Sukmawati Komala

Date: 3/5/2013 8:10:00 AM

sweet Debbie...here is another lovely haiku... so nicely written... enjoyed so much...wishing you all the best dear :) <3 Sk

Debbie Duncan
Date: 3/5/2013 11:02:00 AM

Thank you ;}

Raul Moreno

Date: 3/5/2013 2:41:00 AM

Nice work, I enjoyed the third one. Keep up the good work...

Debbie Duncan
Date: 3/5/2013 10:55:00 AM

Thank you Raul .