Haiku :: 6 :: a Trilogy

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The following three haikus illustrate how I develop an idea. They were written over a few days. The first is my initial thought on how a relationship breaks and then recovers. The other two are more allegorical and more traditional haiku, relating to nature with 5-7-5 syllabification.

HAIKU :: 6a :: PROMISE Together we were, friends we remain … we promise HAIKU :: 6b :: CLOUDS and WINDS Clouds interlacing winds of night separating rejoined by sunrise HAIKU :: 6c :: SUN AND MOON Sun, moon at nightfall separated by darkness rejoined by first light Collection: Haiku

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Jan Allison

Date: 11/18/2019 12:50:00 PM

beautifully penned i especially like the final haiku:-) hugs Jan xx

Beto Riginale
Date: 11/18/2019 1:49:00 PM

Hello Jan! Thank you for your comment. I also prefer (at least for now) the third version. But given my penchant for revising my work, there may be more versions in the future :-) beto